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Always
Contributed by
_smelly_oranges_
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Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 01:50:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
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You said youd always love me
You said youd always care
I thought you were the one for me
And i knew your love was rare
We used to meet with a hug
We said goodbye with a kiss
But right now that doesnt matter to me
Cause its you and your love that i miss
Now you say its over
Without one last goodbye
Now you, the one i thought was the "love of my life" . . .
Is the reason that i cry
So, now i want you to know what you do
My feelings wil remain the same
And i will *still*always*love*you*
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_smelly_oranges_
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2005-02-09 01:50:42]
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Re: Always
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 01:52:07 AM AEST
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| :-) Sweet write. |
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Re: Always
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 02:02:35 AM AEST
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adorable
If I may ask.... where did you come up with smelly oranges?? that really caught my attention
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Re: Always
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by aprilrose on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 02:41:18 AM AEST
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it is a great poem full of feelings that are real with every heart break...keep wrighting
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Re: Always
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by Arsenic on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 05:48:05 AM AEST
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Very good. Suggest changing Is to Are in the 12th line, just for readability... and I had a tough time with the 13th (So, now I want...). Can't place my finger on it, but I had to read that line twice, messing up the flow. However, I'm slower then the average amature poet :-)
Look forward to reding more of your work. So, where does Smelly Ornges come from?
Warm regards,
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Re: Always
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 08:21:26 AM AEST
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awww that was very sweet and loving, a joy to read,
pix xx |
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Re: Always
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by desireemiote on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 10:06:02 AM AEST
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now I'm curious too... where did the smelly oranges thing come from?
I did like the flow of the poem... and the is to are thing.. I somehow managed to read it as are automatically so when I saw the comment about that I had to scroll back up to the poem to know what they meant.. oops.. I pre corrected it in my head..
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