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I Wish They'd Play My Soundtrack
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
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Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 08:39:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The mornings dark and cold outside Its faded hues of blue transparent smoke But once Im safe inside this room Pale yellow melts down concrete bricks While Nowhere strums guitar I feel like thats just where I am, Nowhere with no windows Nowheres in the corner of the world and safe away Tucked inside white bricks and oaken doors, tucked in bed With just one window to the world outside, unnoticed yet still there My mind lingers near that window, flies out and swirls around Im reflecting, Im a looking glass, Im jealous, Im forlorn Now my minds outside the door at the window looking in Seeing all the four of us, like Tiffanys My ears drink in the music saturated with guitar Still Im thirsty, but this is my morning I wish this were my life Guitar picks and Stevens hair Bens guitar case, all the stickers Cozy wrapped in Jareds arms Writing poems while they make music Wish that I could sing my songs, the songs locked somewhere deep within But I feel much like the old piano made of unstained, unfinished wood Broken keys like broken spirits, never used like those guitars Im so thirsty, but this is my morning Ill hold on to this, this is my morning, Ill hold onto this like a glass I wish my glass were filled with water, the music of this morning The music of my morning Im proud of these musicians Though Im jealous, struck with envy I wish this were my life But my ears will only hear these fragments of these songs Drinking in the music drenched with two of their guitars And my minds eye will stay outside, its nose pressed against the window to the inside Reflecting and longing just like Tiffanys While the room swirls round in one way And outside swirls drifting in another And I wish this were my morning I wish this were my life And I wish this were my morning And I wish this were my life
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Re: I Wish They'd Play My Soundtrack
(User Rating: 1 ) by desireemiote on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 11:58:59 PM AEST (User
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I love the imagery and repetition in this poem and even though the subject is a personal account of a personal event this poem makes me feel like I'm there and i can understand the situation to a point.
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Re: I Wish They'd Play My Soundtrack
(User Rating: 1 ) by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 01:19:32 PM AEST (User
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Awesome write here Chelsea |
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Re: I Wish They'd Play My Soundtrack
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 04:55:26 PM AEST (User
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Wonderful write. I enjoyed reading this. |
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Re: I Wish They'd Play My Soundtrack
(User Rating: 1 ) by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 05:18:02 AM AEST (User
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Ohh that was really good Chels, i really admired the way you have composed this. Well writen poem at it's best.
Jane xx |
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Re: I Wish They'd Play My Soundtrack
(User Rating: 1 ) by foxwillow on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 07:39:53 AM AEST (User
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pure emotion.. rolling over itself, i feel the wants and needs of the writer, like a crystal bubble encapsualting a perfect moment of fullfilment and reflection, but also at the same time..likens itself to the piano..a yet unfulfilled person with so much to give to life..I feel the writer is about to blossom and show the world what she's really made of......................................................! (watch this space) |
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Re: I Wish They'd Play My Soundtrack
(User Rating: 1 ) by eatfresh22 on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 12:38:15 AM AEST (User
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Beautiful wishes. Title was deep and well-thought out. The dreams are lovely, don't self-destruct them. Drift inside....love has that power, didn't anyone tell you?
~Carrie~ |
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