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Fear Thy Disease
Contributed by
Bleeding_Nightmares
on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 04:32:37 AM in AEST
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Fear Thy Disease
Bloody rivers stain my cheeks
Tears that have fallen for weeks
In a corner I huddle deeply afraid
Of him the one my innocence paid
Whos fleshy blade severed below
Deeply thrust creating a bloody flow
Now I forever live in festering fear
Of the disease he forces me to share.
By Bleeding_Nightmares
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Bleeding_Nightmares
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2005-02-10 04:32:37]
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Re: Fear Thy Disease
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by _smelly_oranges_ on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 04:34:53 AM AEST
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| well written this is a good poem |
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Re: Fear Thy Disease
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by aprilrose on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 04:37:45 AM AEST
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| very well written i love this poem thanks for posting it you are a great wrighter |
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Re: Fear Thy Disease
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 04:47:37 AM AEST
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Wow you are a great writer, your pices has a lot of depth into it. And why do i have a feeling i know you? LOL. Anyways great write.
Jane x |
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Re: Fear Thy Disease
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 08:01:00 AM AEST
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Dark, sad, and full of impact.
I like your style.
Stitch |
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Re: Fear Thy Disease
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by pixie on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 12:02:10 PM AEST
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very well written, dark and straight to the point,
pix xx |
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Re: Fear Thy Disease
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 15th February 2005 @ 10:13:15 PM AEST
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very brilliant poem. but the last verse,
"Now I forever live in festering fear
Of the disease he forces me to share." needs to stick to the rhyme scheme. it, as an ending is amazing, but im a stickler for rhymes...the price of being a rhyme freak i guess.
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