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Battling Mentality
Contributed by
Nazmythian
on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 03:57:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Dark demonic faces
Melting off in pain
Twisting up in fear
Calling out my name
Mock me from the shadows
Disembodied voices
Razor sharpened words
Dripping of hatred
All that can be heard
Hearts swing from the gallows
Ebon colored eyes
Vacant hollow orbs
Stare at empty space
Light becomes absorbed
Into unfathomed depths
Reflecting images
Metal cast of man
Cold descending steel
Falling from my hand
That sent them to their deaths
Through knee-deep blood I wade
Pushing bones aside
Forging on alone
Slowly lose my mind
Recalling every stroke
Landscape devastated
As death was employed
Vegetation gone
Everything destroyed
No single word was spoke
Hands that I had severed
Sinking underground
Reaching out to me
Try to drag me down
That I may share their fate
A shadow of myself
Appears suddenly
Imploring of me
Return to sanity
And prey its not too late
The demons of my dreams
Trapped within the light
Scream and start to flee
As I open eyes
Another day is won
In moments of reprieve
Life returns again
Wander through my day
Might tonight they win
Press on until its done
Copyright ©
Nazmythian
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 04:05:59 PM AEST
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Goodness! Hope you're alright! This must be good. It got to me emotionally with it's deep expression.
blessings. |
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by Rxqueen on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 04:23:04 PM AEST
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| Wow, this was absolutely amazing! I loved every part of it. Such vivid imagery. Your use of language rocked! Have you ever seen What Dreams May Come? Well, this peice reminded me of the Hell in that movie like crazy! Very very good!!! |
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by FleurdeSang on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 04:32:33 PM AEST
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Ah, still in this seemingly endless battle... I guess most of us are on the brink this past week, huh? :*( I'm hating myself now, because I feel like I can't do anything to help you through this....
Je pleure pour vous, le chasseur chéri de la nuit.. Pourquoi blessez-vous si, Naz doux ? *think I got that right*
I pray that you feel better, and that this 'mental battle' may end very soon. Sending lots of hugs and love! PM me whenever you can. Feel better honey. Forever,
Votre fleur de souffrance. *Stephy* |
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by Rhymingron on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 04:46:04 PM AEST
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| I thought this was excellent. I love the cadence, the rhymn patter and the way you used the single line every other stanza. I could go on and on. I give it 5. |
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 05:19:34 PM AEST
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I can only offer a smile as I drive by and visit my Nazzy friend! On this poem I didn't SPEED! I took my good ol' time! And it was worth the slow pace!
May light shine in your window
Into your darkest night.
May all the demons wither,
With strength you fight the fight!!!
(((((((Naz)))))))))))))
Angel ALWAYS!!!! :-) |
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 06:06:42 PM AEST
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*lets out breath*
Um..wow..
I think I'm gonna have nightmares. lol.
Stunning imagery in this. I love the peices in Italics too.
Great write hun,
Don't let them drag you down.
*hugs* Phil xx |
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 06:22:13 PM AEST
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Holy shi7, man.
--Ghosty |
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by Psyche on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 06:55:20 PM AEST
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| Straight out of Revelation. Like "B" horror movie creepy (thats a compliment, BTW) |
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 08:49:53 PM AEST
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Damn - that's potent.
I both love and hate this. This is so clearly....... (I'm anticipating that you'll understand that - so I'll not ramble further).
Arms open wide,
~Snemmy~
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by tifrob on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 06:10:35 AM AEST
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If these are truly your nightmares, I'm sorry. If not, write them down as a screen play and you'll be a millionaire tomorrow...lol
Good luck,
J~ |
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 08:39:08 AM AEST
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Omg what a deep deep emotional write. I hope your feeling better coz this was just a sad write.
*Hugs*
Jane x |
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by vibes2go on
Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 03:05:13 PM AEST
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| let's wade through the blood together and go get some bon bons, pop corn and a soda..maybe some candy..then watch the previews..k? |
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Re: Battling Mentality
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 15th February 2005 @ 12:17:06 PM AEST
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Naz, Am I seeing a trend here of fighting off demons? May you always win the battle; and after today, there is always another tomorrow. If at night a cave of horrors we enter in, then the brightness of the day illuminates the goodness that ultimately resides within....and we find our way out! Sorry if i'm off base, but this just came to me....
Hope I didn;t miss the true meaning
Great poem
Willofree
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