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Bide My Time
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 06:08:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I've lost everything
That ever ment anything
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I'll try to bide my time
Before I take whats left,
Thats mine
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Everything is crumbling
My life is dwindleing
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I'll try to bide my time
Before I erase whats left,
Thats kind
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My life is ceasing
I am always grieving
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I'll try to bide my time
Before I end whats left
Thats still in line
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My time is sifting
My life is drifting
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To hell with my time
It's an unhill battle
I drop the life,
Thats mine
~
With this gun's
Rattle...
Copyright ©
ForeverAlone
... [
2005-02-11 18:08:16]
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Re: Bide My Time
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by afterdark on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 07:51:16 PM AEST
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| There were just a few typos..But with you I will overlook that.The piece overall was very good and even though I am not a huge fan of suicide poems this was one of the better one's out there... |
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Re: Bide My Time
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 09:08:35 PM AEST
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| another kurt cobain...wonderful poem, but like amber, i would just bring you back to life and kill you again, and then youd wish that you had done it a more artistic way the first time! |
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Re: Bide My Time
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by xXcrossedXx on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 07:49:55 PM AEST
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((please don't kill yourself!! I've posted it before and I'll post it again as many times as needed)) as for your poem, I don't think it was one of your bests but I liked it all the same. I like your structure, nice write.
--amanda-- |
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