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life!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Contributed by
kitty_girl
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Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 12:38:47 PM in AEST
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fantasy
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life
life with out the sun,the beach would not be fun.
life with out the ground,youd never get around.
life with out a tree,would be kinda sad to me.
life with out the stars,means no jupiteror mars.
if you look around,thers treasures to be found.
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Re: life!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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by Stoney1 on
Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 01:25:54 PM AEST
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Well, kittygirl,
I guess the first question I would ask is how old are you?
For someone of tender years, the poem is not bad. It just
needs a minor edit:
life without the sun, the beach would not be fun.
life without the ground, you'd never get around.
life without a tree, would be kinda sad to me.
life without the stars, means no jupiter or mars.
if you look around, there're treasures to be
found.
Now, as to the proper use of the exclamation point; one will suffice. *g*
Stoney
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Re: life!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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by Arsenic on
Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 02:52:23 PM AEST
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I like your thoughts, looking at “stuff” from a different perspective then we normally do. Thanks for dragging us kicking and screaming away from our “poor me” mentality and focusing on what we have. I go so wrapped up in it, I didn’t even notice the with_out.
ARSENIC
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Re: life!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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by Sinned on
Wednesday, 8th March 2006 @ 06:47:28 PM AEST
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kitty-girl
Cute real kute litle poem.
You haven't written for sometime when are you going to pst again.
The more we write the better we get and this is a good site to learn. Please post again.
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