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i wonder
Contributed by
pink_bullets
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Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 05:41:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I wonder would it of been different,
A strain is put upon me and now I have no choice,
A chain will follow me now,
Around my neck and it won't let me go
A breaking heart, a shattered glass,
All things that are inside of me,
Yet I cannot begin to understand anymore as to why it should be me,
What hurt and pain have I caused this world to have,
I live, I breathe in all that others do,
I shoukdn't feel so upset,
Others around me suffer more than I,
Why should I cry with tears I don't deserve
And so I wonder,
I wonder if we had all been born the same,
Would I feel any better,
Although how would i Know....
What point is there in wondering
Wondering with dreams which will never happen
I will always feel low and no one can lift my head up high
Crystals will always fall,
silently there is nothing left
So I now wonder again
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Re: i wonder
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by fielding88 on
Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 07:09:48 PM AEST
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nice first write i liked ur use of questions
remember 2 post on other ppls stuff too!
and cant wait 2 read sum of ur new stuff |
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Re: i wonder
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 08:56:25 PM AEST
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Hey, this is actually a pretty first good write.
I liked the metaphors used, and the way it was all set up..
The flow was good too.
Keep writing!
~Kt |
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Re: i wonder
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by afraid_of_fear on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 06:26:05 AM AEST
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this is beautiful cres..
love xxx |
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