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Jillian
Contributed by
xoxpaperxheartxox
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Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 02:09:04 PM in AEST
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I broke up with you
You now make my life living hell
What am i to do
When all i can do is yell
I hope you leave
So you can get away from me
All my anger and hate it would relieve
If you would finally see
That ill hate you always
And i dont want you to talk to my friends
Or speak to me in the hallways
This is it you and i are over now it ends
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xoxpaperxheartxox
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2005-02-16 14:09:04]
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Re: Jillian
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by bethie on
Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 02:28:47 PM AEST
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| your hostility comes through loud and clear, but i'm not sure i liked it. it would have to be a bit more subtle for my liking. Nice try though. |
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Re: Jillian
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by xXcrossedXx on
Friday, 18th February 2005 @ 12:16:06 PM AEST
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I like your last sentence. I can feel your anger behind it, why don't you play with it a little more and resubmit.. good luck
--amanda-- |
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Re: Jillian
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 22nd October 2006 @ 03:53:27 PM AEST
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I can feel the frustration vibes in this poem. Just for the record, My name is also Jillian.
Great job to you! |
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