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The Call of Loneliness
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 03:28:55 PM in AEST
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Dumbed down until I am unable to feel
Wipe away the swift flowing tears
Nothing but pain feels real
You laugh, because you can't hear what goes on inside
I try to find a "safe" place to cry,
But no place remains
All I can do is push myself on until I can no longer try
Aspirations and dreams fade to naught
Your lies (so true) they paralyze
Self-confidence shattered like glass
Tears leak from angry skies
Enveloped with a sick sadness
Backed into a corner bruised and battered
I lack the strength to defend myself
Because my tears leave me worn and tattered
I can't do this alone,
But I am alone and I have always been alone
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bobotheclown
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Re: The Call of Loneliness
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 03:31:42 PM AEST
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I think its brilliant as it is. Full of emotion and very well written. Thanks for sharing.
Take care
- Becca |
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Re: The Call of Loneliness
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 04:05:44 PM AEST
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Joel, I don't think you need to change anything in this.... it was well written and so emotional....
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: The Call of Loneliness
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by noone on
Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 04:08:36 PM AEST
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Wow! This is a great poem. You have clearly shown us your emotions, well done! Please keep it the way it is, it really is wonderful, i wish you all the best,
Kirsty x |
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Re: The Call of Loneliness
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 10:21:12 PM AEST
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| so familiar. well done joel as always. |
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Re: The Call of Loneliness
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 05:32:49 AM AEST
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Wow Joel this so emotive, well written hun. You really do know how to write your emotions in a piece of paper and share it with us. Great job.
Jane ^_^ |
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Re: The Call of Loneliness
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th February 2005 @ 10:33:15 AM AEST
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You have definately expressed sadness and despondency oh so well.
Great job! |
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Re: The Call of Loneliness
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by wyrd_faerie on
Friday, 18th February 2005 @ 03:40:47 PM AEST
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this is beautiful joel, but, so many people are here for you...try not to feel so alone...if you ever need me just shout and i swear i'll hear you.
Your lies (so true) they paralyze
incredible xxx |
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Re: The Call of Loneliness
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by waos on
Friday, 18th February 2005 @ 03:52:26 PM AEST
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That's really sad Joel - definitely see the hurt, *hug*, a line that
really stuck out to me was
"Tears leak from angry skies
Enveloped with a sick sadness"
At some spots it didn't flow the greatest but I thought it was well
done; don't forget: you're your own worst critic!!
Later,
~Waos/Kara |
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Re: The Call of Loneliness
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by Deathly_Rose on
Saturday, 19th February 2005 @ 06:58:32 PM AEST
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aww that poem was well written, clearly expressing detailed emotions
keep up the good work, can't wait for the other ones
*~Alicia~* |
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Re: The Call of Loneliness
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by Kie on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 12:52:11 PM AEST
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All I could think about is how lonely, lonely feels. It is tough when you are backed into a corner feeling defeated.
But somehow strength emerges slowly, and we pick ourselves up until we slip again.
Your poetry always make me cry Bo.
Kie |
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