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Take Care
Contributed by
in2thetwilightzone
on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 06:16:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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its such a shock that life turned to this,
im wandering frozen,
lips trembling cold without kiss,
speaking of grieving,
i looked up at the sky today,
i could have sworn i saw you,
so i stood still to pray,
but then the clouds smothered the apperition,
the image was tarnished,
so i picked up my bags and went to jump on the train,
the rusty smells of the station woke me up,
its like dajavu, but this time il never see you again,
now you are laying in peace,
no more thoughts ripping you appart,
im happy you are free now,
my mind can now be as still as your heart,
im glad you descended,
im glad you could be released,
i think we are all kind of happy,
happy now you are deceased,
life will be a struggle for the near days ahead,
i dont know how i can sleep,
knowing your'e not lying next me in our bed,
but lying cold and alone,
your spirit has been lifted but your empty body left dead,
i dont think we will ever find a replacement,
and the hole in our souls will always be there,
but now as i hold your child in my arms,
i whisper to sky with a tear,
"take care"...
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2005-02-17 06:16:14]
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Re: Take Care
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by jeannoh on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 08:24:04 AM AEST
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Great Poem
Emotion in every line
Good flow
Thank you for writing and
sharing this with us
and God Bless
Jeannoh |
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Re: Take Care
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 09:15:01 AM AEST
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Beautiful and heart-wrenching. I really don't know what else to say apart from that its very well written.
Take Care
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Re: Take Care
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 10:05:01 AM AEST
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Oh gosh, this is so sad...
This line struck deep:
its like dajavu, but this time il never see you again,
Such a sad write, but really good too.
*hugs* Phil xxx
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