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Who is to blame?
Contributed by
subnet_spider
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Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 09:28:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Who is to blame, that you are tired?
That didn't find, what you admired?
That you have lost, all you have had,
Raised to the sky, just to fall back,
And who's to blame, that day by day
Your life is going the wrong way,
And lonely became your place,
Behind your window is emptyness...
And dimms the light, and sounds quiet,
And hands are looking for new fights,
And if your pain is relieved -
A brand new sorrow is revealed...
Who is to blame, tell me my friend,
The one is maried, the other's dead,
The one is brat, one is a rat,
And who's to blame that here and there
We rely on each other to be somewhere
But day is dull, and night is empty
All the warm place's already taken...
And dimms the light, and sounds quiet,
And hands are looking for new fights,
And if your pain is relieved -
A brand new sorrow is revealed...
Who is to blame, and what's the secret,
There is no sorrow, but neither joy,
Without defeats there's no victory
And even is life's stripes score.
And who's to blame that you're alone,
And life is one, and so, so long..
And so, so dull.. while you await
That some day soon You will be dead...
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Re: Who is to blame?
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by Scarlett on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 09:35:00 AM AEST
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i thought that the sort of rhyming and sometimes not rhyming was pretty effective.
what did you mean by
"And if your pain is relieved -
A brand new sorrow is revealed..."
interesting write though, i enjoyed it. |
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Re: Who is to blame?
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by Rhymingron on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 10:41:21 AM AEST
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| Very sad, also a very good poem. |
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Re: Who is to blame?
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by loopylou on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 10:50:35 AM AEST
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And if your pain is relieved -
A brand new sorrow is revealed...
i thought that was such a great line |
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Re: Who is to blame?
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by AsrealTheFallen10 on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 12:20:48 PM AEST
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Ya' know...Just blame your self.
I do. Cuz it's always my fault.
Good one though, no?
I like it...
Keep writin, eh? |
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