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Wordless to Echo the World
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
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Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 03:36:26 PM in AEST
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--yes, yes!
yes, it is entirely possible
that I am breathless
and what of it?
when did you last
open -and
expose -and
widen yourself to the dear wordless weeping world
and- expect
and- demand
and for god's sake need
in some sideways untrue wordless-to-echo-the-world
sort of way
and come up stillfeelingstillneeding(something)
maybe laughing in that denied ohhahaitssodamnfunny
manner you do when you think
it's unmade, (you lost, you failed, no air),
it's fallen apart? and worse
than not reaching your idealized
potentialbreath
is the onemorewordlesssplitsecond
of epiphany that -maybe-
you never needed to breathe like that
to begin with . . . did you?
--or maybe
you're not that sort of person
maybe just maybe you
playitsafe
and have never fooled yourself
into thinking you were breathless
before.
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 03:48:04 PM AEST
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Wow Nora...
I really don't know what to say to this.
You seem to have poured so much of you into this poem, it is almost like it will burst.
I may burst.
A fabulous write hunni.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by reprobate on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 03:53:37 PM AEST
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speechless.
great write
thanks for sharing |
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by wolfman on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 03:57:43 PM AEST
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I feel anger and pain when I read this, I am in deep thought about this one. your choice of structure made it interesing to read. it was expresed matter-of-factly which I did enjoy, made it all better. a very good write.
I am a littel out of practice but I wasnt able to quite make out what you were explaning, you are upset at someone and are telling them why, but about what. I am sorry but please explane. and I do hope to get your other wortks soon. be strong and God bless.
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 04:05:11 PM AEST
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Wow Nora, Your usual tipically wonderful write here!
Original form works well with this piece and you manage to make two statements at once.
And I agree....don't edit! |
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by freckle on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 04:51:39 PM AEST
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| Great poem. I agree with the one post about how it feels as if it's going to burst. I think just reading it makes one a bit breathless! |
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by neveryours on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 06:09:17 PM AEST
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nice...
I could quote here and there, but you know it is an experience to read this as a whole. You have filled it with such life.
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by MoonlitAngel on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 05:14:20 AM AEST
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i've read this about 6 times now... and... well, phil put it very well. i echo her sentiments.
i can apply so many different "breaths" to this poem, and every time it works beautifully. i'd love to know exactly what you were thinking when you wrote it... but for once... i think i've decided how i'm taking it. i think. i may have to read it a few more times yet. i dunno, something about it makes me not want to settle on any one exact interpretation.
absolutely fantastic job, it really does feel like you poured so much of yourself into this. it was exhilarating to read the very first time, it still is every time, but the first time just took my breath away. absolutely effing fantastic. |
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 07:51:00 AM AEST
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I think I may be breathless on how good this is Nora; this was like an overdrive on my head. This was done to perfection even though you show such anger for this person or someone.
I do think that Philly said it better “It feels like it’s bursting” that is how I feel when I read this poem.
You do have a great way of writing and like always you sure did know how to wow us all with your poetic skills.
Jane ;-) |
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 07:56:17 AM AEST
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brilliant work Nora truly a masterpiece
pix xx |
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 24th February 2005 @ 11:58:22 PM AEST
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Very nicely done. Original, creative and just bloody brilliant, if I may say so. I think it would be a shame to edit it anyway, so I'm glad you're not. A masterpiece if I ever saw one.
Take Care
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 02:22:38 AM AEST
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Wordless to echo the world.
You title is a timeless riddles, a pun of sorts and a little perplexing.
You effectively begin with “—yes, yes!” a demonstration of the effect of an echo.
Is the echo perhaps a representation of internal conflicting values and/ or opinions?
“Widen yourself to the dear wordless weeping world”
Are you perhaps questioning yourself, here, asking yourself, why you have spoken, aloud, about a certain matter?
“and- expect”
It is within human nature, after all?
Disappointment is inevitable.
“in some sideways untrue wordless-to-echo-the-world
sort of way”
Confusing, yet somewhat logical!
Does nothingness have a voice to echo?
Are you personifying nothingness?
“and come up stillfeelingstillneeding(something)”
An interesting technique, in which has effectively illustrated your immediate mood and feelings of perhaps rapid thoughts or simply pensiveness.
“maybe laughing in that denied ohhahaitssodamnfunny”
I really feel that this line had been composed in its most raw and natural state.
Hats off to you, for revealing this unto an awaiting audience.
There is honesty within your words, despite their colloquial disposition, I find them more so significant than butter up eloquence.
is the one more “wordlesssplitsecond”
A perfect effigy for enlightenment of reason, this is the most awe -inspiring thing I have come across in a long while.
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 4th March 2005 @ 05:51:04 PM AEST
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Well now --- here's a lesson in the making! Next time I consider stepping away from YPDC for any amount of time - I'll remind myself that I nearly missed this for having done so recently!
Add me to the Philly/Jane/Dee/Carol list of those that felt this so full it was nearly ready to burst... this piece will not sit quietly on the page - even it knows it is too big for that. I'd offer that it is strength embedded here... strength and passion and wisdom and intensity and... ok, a bit of frustration as well... but - resolution right coming with it.
You're opening lines are perfection. Funny thing is... I just commented on another of yours and left that screen thinking I really have missed visits to your page. But I came here - in a roundabout way (off the top 100 list), not knowing it was yours... until I read the opening lines. They could not be any more perfectly... well, you.
I absolutely adore your work - always have, always will... of this I haven't the slightest doubt-
Write on, dear Nora --- for heavens sake... please do. : )
~Snemmy~ |
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by liquidsunshine on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 07:50:05 AM AEST
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Reading this, I felt my heart beating out of my chest and that lump of frustration that often clogs my throat was about to burst...
This is a very powerful, enigmatic, thought-provoking poem and I love it.
Lots of love and peace be with you,
Chelsea |
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by Eve on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 03:42:02 PM AEST
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This is one of those that I've come back to well over a few times . . . and, yes, that happens to me with a lot of your work but this one more recently. I have to say my heart's not jarred any less with each return to it, and whether I read this silently or aloud or recite it to myself without even needing to read I love it. I just love it, and the words are so fall-from-your-tongue and/or stick-to-your-mind that I can't get over it right now.
But I've spoken long enough.
Keep writing, Viking friend,
-Eve. |
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Re: Wordless to Echo the World
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 10:10:24 PM AEST
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You never disappoint and this certainly
doesn't ever need to be edited. I loved the
ending and continuance of being
"breathless."
the title is perfect, a very well-written piece. |
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