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A Hole in the World
Contributed by
KSUHO11
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Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 09:13:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
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A Hole in the World
You used to be everything to me, everything I wanted
But you started to change
You started to question, started to doubt, started to lose faith
I dont know how to handle this disaster
It seems to be moving faster and faster
What do you want from me
What did you expect
I wont ever understand
How things became so different
I used to see the fire in your eyes
When I was in the prize between your thighs
But know its just so cold
Can this be reconciled, can we be saved
Are you still what I want, what I need
Im trying to see clearly
But it just keeps getting murkier and murkier
I am lost without you
There is a whole in the world
Just for me
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KSUHO11
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2005-02-22 21:13:14]
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Re: A Hole in the World
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by allforyou on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 10:00:47 PM AEST
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Some advice from a complete stranger: change can be good, it will open up the eyes of you and your now ex-girlfriend. Maybe you will find that she really is what you want, but until you know for sure it is better to do what you have done than lie to her by staying. You've made a good choice, don't feel so down about it.
"Can this be reconciled, can we be saved
Are you still what I want, what I need
I’m trying to see clearly
But it just keeps getting murkier and murkier"
I especially like this part of the poem. It shows your uncertainty of the situation and how you feel and how you really want things to get better, but you can't see how to go about bringing change.
Don't worry. If things seem so bad try looking for the pro's about what's going on. Things can only get better.
--Kara
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Re: A Hole in the World
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 10:39:31 PM AEST
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| my motto, "in the end everyone dies anyway" might apply here. things are only as important as we make them to be. i think this is one of your better writes that i have seen from you. |
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Re: A Hole in the World
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by mypetmeatball on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 11:11:37 PM AEST
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This (to me) looks like they'd better suit as song lyrics than as a poem.
You should look into it. Behind the right tune I think it could be very good. |
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