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Darkness falls
Contributed by
Les4567
on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 09:18:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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Diminishing Light
Empty seclusion
Dusk comes
Creeping
Sneaking behind you
Like a nimble
Black cat
Ready to pounce
When the time
Is right
When night falls
A storm of stars
Bombard the sky
Shedding their
Peaceful light
Down on to us
Our sun of twilight
Appears in all
Of his glory
Casting light upon
The chilled Earth
When Darkness falls
It's a beautiful sight
The moon and stars
Are shining
So blissfully
So bright
Copyright ©
Les4567
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2005-02-22 21:18:35]
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Re: Darkness falls
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by Rhymingron on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 10:06:20 PM AEST
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| Good poem. Very descriptive. |
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Re: Darkness falls
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 10:26:26 PM AEST
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i liked most of this poem quite a bit. its very good to incorporate metephors in your poems, but i feel that the whole cat bit can be taken out to make this an overall better piece. i liked this part especially in your poem,
"When night falls
A storm of stars
Bombard the sky
Shedding their
Peaceful light" your ending was quite good too. a great ending can make a masterpiece afterall.
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Re: Darkness falls
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by DorianChambers on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 10:29:25 PM AEST
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this is my first comment on your writting it won't be my last, verry beautiful, i envissioned
a large autum moon peering through ever
green trees in the shaddowed night, lovely
peice of poetry . . .
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Re: Darkness falls
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by mina-1 on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 12:29:08 AM AEST
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this is an absolutely beautiful piece of poetry, Leslie. Very descriptive and the language used is very expressive. A great poem Leslie.
keep up the great work |
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Re: Darkness falls
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 05:11:00 AM AEST
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Well I luv my cats so it's a masterpeice any place, any time.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Darkness falls
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 28th February 2005 @ 01:16:51 PM AEST
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"When night falls
A storm of stars
Bombard the sky ..."
I really liked those lines, Leslie. They say so much, and paint an impressive picture. Fantastic words.
Nazmythian ~
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