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Not Worthy of a Title
Contributed by
LadyWynter
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Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 12:54:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
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When he touches you I wonder
If he ever thinks of me
Is it your face he imagines
Or is it mine he sees
Do you ever sit and wonder
Do you even want to know
Or clinging to denial
Do you go on with the show
I ask you for my own mind
For I fail to understand
How knowing what was in the past
You sit and hold his hand
Can you really just forget the nights
He drew me to your bed
Are you as happy as you seem
Or inside are you dead
Does it not even concern you
That I know his body too
That I could describe in great detail
The things he made me do
This may sound harsh, I'm sorry
But I really just don't see
How Mom you can forgive him
For what he did to me
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LadyWynter
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Re: Not Worthy of a Title
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by kandis on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 01:04:34 PM AEST
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| Beautiful, but heart-breaking. |
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Re: Not Worthy of a Title
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 01:31:14 PM AEST
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Oh gosh... this is so sad, and so...nasty, but not to your mother. To you...
I hope this is fiction, but if it's not I am sorry this happened to you.
Great write, I didnt see the end coming.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Not Worthy of a Title
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by Nazmythian on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 01:52:46 PM AEST
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Everything is worthy of a title. I was drawn into this so deep, the ending just floored me. A stunning write that I certainly hope is personally fictional.
I have been thinking of possible title ideas and ... what about Mystery ... plain, simple, to the point.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Not Worthy of a Title
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 03:13:31 PM AEST
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wow for some reason I was thinking it was about an affair or something then the end dropped me and I sit here with mouth open very emotional write
Michelle |
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Re: Not Worthy of a Title
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by Kimmie1980ca on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 10:21:10 PM AEST
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| Wow.....your poem really made my mouth drop at the end. Excellent poem...really feel the emotion. |
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Re: Not Worthy of a Title
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 03:26:48 AM AEST
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| WOW........ such brutal truth & honesty in your words.... such heartbreak.... I am so in awe... WOW!!!! |
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Re: Not Worthy of a Title
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by Dusty on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 02:04:34 PM AEST
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Wow! That last line screwed my head all up. I had to reread the whole thing. Powerful write!!So sad and terrible.(Not the write, the idea)
~Dusty~
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Re: Not Worthy of a Title
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 09:34:10 AM AEST
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I wonder what you're referring to in the title. At any rate, I think the poem is strong, and has good R&R.
Keep writing.
N_F |
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