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The Rain
Contributed by
bibi
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Thursday, 24th February 2005 @ 06:40:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I see the rain. The sky is crying
It's cold and grey and I am dying
The day it lingers as I weep
and all my sorrow runs so deep
I ask myself what can I do
How will I live without my you
I cannot call,there's noone there
There's noone else to ever care
No one to warm me when I'm cold
No one to share as I grow old
The raindrops fall,they hit the pane
My heart it cries and calls your name
If I had known you'd leave my side
I would have stayed to give you life
Spent more time,appreciate
Take away what made you ache
I would have said I loved you more
Fix all the things that had you torn
But now I watch the rain fall down
and cry because you're not around
The love you gave for only me
The outside world will never see
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bibi
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2005-02-24 18:40:05]
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Re: The Rain
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by savedbydeath on
Thursday, 24th February 2005 @ 07:36:27 PM AEST
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aww such a sad but very nice write,even though u lost ur sister and i'm sorry to hear,theres still other ppl to call.and theres always ppl u can run to to help u with ur problems and show u the love u got from ur sister,anyways awesome write,keep it up
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Re: The Rain
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by emystar on
Thursday, 24th February 2005 @ 09:08:21 PM AEST
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I'm so sorry for your loss.
This is a great write even tho it's sad.
It's a masterpeice as we all feel that emptiness when someone dies.
Keep writing as it certanly helps.
luv, huggs, prayer,
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Re: The Rain
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by dreaming-of-your-love on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 05:05:38 PM AEST
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I AM VERY SRY FOR YOUR LOSS*FOREVERWILL SHE BE IN YOUR HEART*
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Re: The Rain
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by beamer on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 05:05:52 AM AEST
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I cried, and I am sorry for your loss and the pain you feel. The words you wrote are beautiful and touching. Your sister, I think would be, or depending on your beliefs, is proud, of that I am certain.
Take Care
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Re: The Rain
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 09:02:12 AM AEST
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"The love you gave for only me
The outside world will never see"
I think you showed a glimpse of how her love affected you in this poem, which was powerfully evocative and very well presented. I too have felt the stricken nature of loss - there is no pill or remedy, just the pain - and the poetry.
Yet I never had poetry. You should write your sister more often, as I think she would love to have you show us all how much you feel for her.
Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: The Rain
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by Archie on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 03:09:08 PM AEST
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| Firstly I am sorrry for your loss and secondly You have written a very speacial poem to your sister. This is a splendid write. |
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