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Glass Doll
Contributed by
xXcrossedXx
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Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 01:17:21 AM in AEST
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Living in a glass house
Put out on display.
Everybody stopping by
While you silentlyhope they'll go away.
No windows, no doors
Nowhere to run and hide.
All but light and glass
To help others peer inside.
No emotion you can hold
For you're just a sight to see.
No one ever dares to enter
To get to know who you could really be.
Watching...
Waiting...
But they don't ever leave
You're beautiful, you're mesmerizing.
You must stay calm while they stare
But your emotions are slowly rising.
You can't stay bottled up
But they'll never let you alone.
Cause everyone's always watching
Looking through your glass home.
Don't say a word,
Don't take a breath,
You must stand still,
Watching...
Waiting...
For Death.
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Re: Glass Doll
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by Spazzo on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 02:45:02 AM AEST
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Great poem. I hope you feel better.
Scott |
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Re: Glass Doll
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by sicknivesevered on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 02:57:45 AM AEST
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| Well, the ending was blunt. Knocked kinda ajar there, but thats not really a bad thing. I like the whole theme to it. Pretty nifty. |
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Re: Glass Doll
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by Mangs on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 04:58:44 AM AEST
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| Wonderful write...kinda puts life in a different perspective...i loved this one. |
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Re: Glass Doll
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by Gothchyk on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 08:34:32 PM AEST
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| I agree w/ Mangs, this does put a different perspective to life but sometimes looking at things differently can set you free. Great write. |
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Re: Glass Doll
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by fielding88 on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 01:40:53 PM AEST
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| Whoa. What a solid ending here! The repetition was well constructed and that ending was just outstanding. The metaphor you've used is really superb too, I was expecting it to take a different turn with the idea of a glass house, with a heavier (and sadly traditional) theme of something that would shatter in an instant. lol i'm glad I wasnt reading a poem like that though. This was really a great piece. |
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