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Heartlessly Tearless
Contributed by
essentially9
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Monday, 28th February 2005 @ 09:38:42 PM in AEST
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Heartlessly Tearless
I miss you more with every day
As it reflects in the tear stains
Your picture fills every frame
That I keep farthest from pain
But all you do is break me
And stitch me at the seams
By taking all of my dreams
To induce silent screams
You break me open
And leave me broken
So now in pieces I lay
Till delusions go away
Forever to stay this way
With every day
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essentially9
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2005-02-28 21:38:42]
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Re: Heartlessly Tearless
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by ForeverAlone on
Monday, 28th February 2005 @ 10:55:37 PM AEST
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I love this Jen...the rythem is very different then all your previous work...Once again very well done.....=]
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Re: Heartlessly Tearless
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by rockstarr12747 on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 12:55:03 AM AEST
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this is the first timefor me seeing one of your poems i liked it it seems your feeling the same way as i am see i lost a guy i loved because he counted me as his little sister iam sixteen and still feel like giving up if you read a poem named FOR YOU its about this guy writen by me if you can comment id really appresiacte it thanks
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Re: Heartlessly Tearless
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 06:17:33 AM AEST
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| I feel its depth..very powerful, emotional expression of pain....:Venkat |
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Re: Heartlessly Tearless
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 01:16:33 PM AEST
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I really like this, I think that the second stanza was the best though, it somehow seemed more 'clever' (wrong word, but I hope you know what I mean) and more real, less cliched.
The first two lines were a little off for me, they seemed slightly forced. But still very good.
Great write my friend.
*huggies* Phil xxx |
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Re: Heartlessly Tearless
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 06:48:29 PM AEST
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"By taking all of my dreams
To induce silent screams"
What a heart rending read this was. I was
held from the first line to the last and was left
wishing for more. Really good write there.
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Re: Heartlessly Tearless
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 01:29:27 PM AEST
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Sad but almost dark.
People always say...Pull yourself together, don't let them do that to you!
But its not ever that easy. When we care, we leave ourselves open for that.
Great expression of feeling conveyed to the reader! |
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