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Hold On (Sometimes)
Contributed by
allforyou
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Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 05:37:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Sometimes it feels like I'm standing at the edge of the world, waiting for a gust of wind to blow me away. Like a paper airplane I fly a bumpy, crooked path.
Sometimes it feels like time laughs in my face, taunts me because I rely on it. I'm just standing water without the sands of time to crash upon.
Sometimes I cut my problems away and I wake up with my eyes shut. I'm blind and bleeding but I can still hold on.
Sometimes I feel like letting go, giving up. I just want to fall to the ground and stay in Autumn. Let me break and be walked all over.
Sometimes its like I'm all alone in this overstuffed town. My heart is empty but I'm still weighed down.
Sometimes its just no use trying to be something I'm not. I can never change but I can still hold on.
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Re: Hold On (Sometimes)
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by Live2Die on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 05:46:27 PM AEST
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Woah. Something about this really hit me. This is an amazing poem, especially on the subject your writing...I really hope things get better for you. Know we're always here, and by we're I mean most of the members on YPDC.
*hugz*
here for you
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Re: Hold On (Sometimes)
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 06:56:39 PM AEST
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This is more of a story than a poem, but it
was still expertly written and crafted. You CAN
change it is hard, but if I can change then so
can you all it takes is some effort and a will to
change. I liked the 3rd stanza/paragraph the
best it shows that even though you face
adversity you still remain strong. I encourage
you to use that strength to affect change in
yourself. Keep on writing.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Hold On (Sometimes)
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by xxbreathlessx on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 08:34:51 PM AEST
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| this has go to be the best poem ive read in a while. even though its about a tough subject i admire your strength and determination. its just incredible. but well tough times is what makes you value things more so...i hope you get out of this learning a valuable lesson and i hope you think about wriing, becuase from what i see you are amazing at it. |
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