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°°°My Waterfall°°°
Contributed by
OreO
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Sunday, 15th December 2002 @ 12:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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I sat by the cold crystal clear waterfall
I dreamt of this moment of having it all
The white flowers bloomed on the lillypad's green
It was somthing before that i never had seen
The taste of honey suckle trees on my lips
And hummingbirds racing, and taking slow dips
The sky has no sun, and the dark has no sight
There's never a sunray, and never a night
Now sitting there quietly i removed all my clothes
I had a deep passion for my waterfall so close
My desire to feel it drip down my warm skin
Overcame me and then this is where it begins
I slid my warm body in the waterfall's lust
I felt all it's wetness engulf me in trust
Then closed my eyes and i moaned out it's name
I knew that these waters i never could tame
Now beads of desire they drip down my hips
As i bathe in the waterfall's crystal clear mist
I see through the crystal blue waterfall's sight
And i knew that i'd live here the rest of my life
I opened my mouth as i bit my red lips
As the waterfall gently grabbed ahold of my hips
It moaned out my name and made sweet love to me
Now forever i'll live here my waterfalls captured me
Copyright ©
OreO
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2002-12-15 12:00:00]
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Re: °°°My Waterfall°°°
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 15th December 2002 @ 12:06:53 PM AEST
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Oreo..this was terrific....I loved it... I too have a thing for waterfalls. When I was 16 I visited Niagara Falls in Canada and I said that I'd like to spend my honeymoon there.. Never happened tho...lol..
Anyway, this was great!!!
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Re: °°°My Waterfall°°°
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by Panther_1978 on
Sunday, 15th December 2002 @ 12:45:20 PM AEST
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Hello OreO,
I loved the way you get more and more passionate with the waterfall! Great Write |
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Re: °°°My Waterfall°°°
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by Nessiecat on
Sunday, 15th December 2002 @ 03:32:52 PM AEST
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Lovely stuff OreO!
The sensual bits came as something of a suprise, it's quite a work, this one.
By the way, you never know what might happen in the future. You might even have a wedding under a waterfall. Don't you give up.
xxxx
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Re: °°°My Waterfall°°°
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by Ilhar on
Sunday, 15th December 2002 @ 03:40:28 PM AEST
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| very good i also love the water you painted a very vivid picture |
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Re: °°°My Waterfall°°°
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by yellow_sundragon on
Sunday, 15th December 2002 @ 05:16:46 PM AEST
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O Oreo! This is absolutly AMAZING!! This is great work, my friend! I love the way you got more and more sensual as you went along. And I totally understand, I love water.
YS |
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Re: °°°My Waterfall°°°
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by princesspurty on
Sunday, 15th December 2002 @ 05:49:38 PM AEST
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| very beautiful! loved the visuals |
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Re: °°°My Waterfall°°°
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 15th December 2002 @ 07:57:11 PM AEST
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Wow, this was so amazing I love how beautifully crafted all your poems are. There all so well written and leave me speechless. I agree with Nessiecat dont give up on not getting married. There's lots of guys out there a guy would be lucky to have you. The sensual parts as someone mentioned came as a bit of a surprise especially the 2nd to last line. AWESOME POEM!
Love ya,
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Re: °°°My Waterfall°°°
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 16th December 2002 @ 12:19:34 AM AEST
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| Yeah, I especially liked the part where you had sex with the waterfall. I mean, that was great. |
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Re: °°°My Waterfall°°°
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by Sarah22 on
Monday, 16th December 2002 @ 12:56:37 AM AEST
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beautiful poem
keep writing . |
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Re: °°°My Waterfall°°°
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by InexactExactness on
Monday, 16th December 2002 @ 04:08:18 PM AEST
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I love the sensuality in your poetry oreo....it's amazing and so real....and what better way to enjoy a special moment than with a crystal clear waterfall...keep writing and i'll keep reading... :)
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Re: °°°My Waterfall°°°
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by wordsy on
Friday, 27th December 2002 @ 11:30:25 PM AEST
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And as I did drown within its sultry depths
and float upon its foaming crown, my heart yearned lustily to caress its bountiful treasures.
Very good imagery. I could feel the tingling spray as I followed you through the ever rising mist.
wordsy.
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Re: °°°My Waterfall°°°
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by nomad on
Thursday, 16th January 2003 @ 06:23:08 PM AEST
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| Very sensual, very passionate, OreO. You make an exquisite delight out of a waterall. |
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