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Day Work
Contributed by
Red_October
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Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 03:29:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Starchy jacket
STRAIGHTEN UP
Day work is like a banana you
want to un-peel
Do you feel
free when you step outside
or do you fear the light,
do you want to hide?
Ironed black pants
like to walk your legs for you
gloomy to the conference room
filled by flourescent light
There the crowd tries
to muster creativity
but they've all been squeezed dry.
Go Figure.
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Red_October
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2005-03-03 15:29:03]
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Re: Day Work
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by pixie on
Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 03:30:13 PM AEST
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wow that was brilliant, I loved it!!!
pix xx |
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Re: Day Work
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by allforyou on
Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 04:08:25 PM AEST
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"Ironed black pants
like to walk your legs for you"
This is the best part of your poem. The entire this is simply lovable, but this part really expresses well the being out of control that I sense you were writing about. Well, that's the vibe I get from this poem. Your intentions might have been completely different. Over all excellent write. Keep it up.
--Kara
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Re: Day Work
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by N0body on
Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 04:46:02 PM AEST
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| Tell it like it is. |
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Re: Day Work
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by Scarlett on
Friday, 4th March 2005 @ 04:38:03 AM AEST
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| you've hit the nail on the head, brought up so many mental images for me (i work in an office). |
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Re: Day Work
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by Rhymingron on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 12:52:20 PM AEST
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| Very well said. |
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