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Sometimes You
Contributed by
valek
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Friday, 4th March 2005 @ 02:25:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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the soft touch of concrete
gently settling on my face
positive and negative pulses swearving within each other
i have no concept of reality
my face feels like im crying
i feel no sadness inside
the blood slowly trickles its way
down towards my blistered lips
i feel so strong inside
with flesh weak exterior concepts
i try to return to my feet
my mouth kisses asphalt again
im normally alone here all time
but sometimes i see you walk by
you used to stop sometimes, make contact with your eyes
now you just continue walking, kicking my as you pass
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Re: Sometimes You
(User Rating: 1 )
by lostlady38 on
Friday, 4th March 2005 @ 06:41:22 PM AEST
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| really good work.honest, plain-spoken. has good potential. |
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Re: Sometimes You
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by poeteeza on
Saturday, 5th March 2005 @ 01:18:42 AM AEST
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anything but simple....
thought this was very metaphoric- the imagery was revealing, yet subtle and abstract..
i was feeling it- Write on...
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