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My Very Last Rhyme
Contributed by
kymmers
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Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 12:33:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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My life is slipping away
with every short breath I take
I've lost so many moments
and made so many mistakes.
The past few months of my lilfe
have been a living hell.
But there's nobody hear to listen
So it's my "High Times Journal" I'll tell.
I've lost everything I've loved
my family, friends, and car
But what I really miss the most is myself...
It's what I want back by far.
Please, I only want someone to listen
To all my thoughts and feelings inside
But I guess thats too much to ask
So I'll swallow another pill and go for a ride
My mind begins to clear
And my pupils get real big
Then I think I look real good in a mirror
but all I really look like is a twig
Yeah, you might have thought that was funny
but its truth straight from the heart
and let me tell you one more thing
getting mixed up with drugs is not at all smart.
So please just smile for me
Just knowing your life is great
Cause my life is probably almost over
I probably wont even make it to twenty eight.
Well thank you very much and
I'm sorry I took so much of your time
but i really hope you enjoyed it
this my very last rhyme
Copyright ©
kymmers
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2005-03-08 12:33:37]
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Re: My Very Last Rhyme
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 12:45:59 PM AEST
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| Very sad poem. I hope it's not your life, that would be a waste. |
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Re: My Very Last Rhyme
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by Live2Die on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 12:48:46 PM AEST
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I agree with Shey. I truly great write, but I too hope that this is not really your life, for Shey is it. It would be a terrible waste. If it is your life, know we're here to listen and help.
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Re: My Very Last Rhyme
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 01:18:53 PM AEST
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Very sad write but u said it well.
I jus posted a poem called WILL KILL.
Please read it as it's about depression.
I'm so sorry that all this has happened to you. p.m. any time u wonna talk.
Please don't stop writing as it's very good for you to get your feelings out.
I will pray for u.
Luv, huggs, faith, hope, joy peace, prayer,
emy
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Re: My Very Last Rhyme
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by xtremcalibur on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 02:11:42 PM AEST
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| I can only hope that this is just a poem that needed to be written. A way to vent your feelings about things inside. But if it is real life and you mean it, then just take one thing into consideration. Should you take your own life, imagine who else you might kill in the process. Then it will become a selfish and murderous thing. You will kill all those who loved you also. So, before you go and do something, think about those who you will die because they will miss you. I liked your write a lot and your contribution to the world of poetry should not be dismissed. Let it not be your last. One Voice speaks loudly. Thank you for being that voice. |
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Re: My Very Last Rhyme
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by Kay-Kay on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 03:25:06 PM AEST
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wow this is a great poem but it is very emotional it brought a tear to my eye, i had a friend die a few years ago because he over-dosed on pills, if this is about your true life please be careful and dont let that happen to you, but great poem it makes good sense and it rhymes very well. keep 'em coming.
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Re: My Very Last Rhyme
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by SourPatchGurl on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 03:28:30 PM AEST
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This poem is very dark, but good. Yes drugs are addicting and sometimes you can't stop. Keep the poems coming, I would like to read more.
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Re: My Very Last Rhyme
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by wolfman on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 04:06:24 PM AEST
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welcome to YPDC, here there is always some one who will listen just ask, and please do enjoy yourself.
this was a sad peom but it was told in a way that made us see what you were felling at that point in time. I too hope that this is just you venting your pain, but if it is please we emplore you not to do this, yes you may think that your life is over because you have lost every thing but take it from us there is so much more good that will happen to you true there will also be bad things but they are there to make us appreciate the good we have all the more. again if you need to talk please just ask us we are always here and ready to help, I will pray for you.
this was a well writing poem the flow and your choice of words made it much better, seperating it in to stansas would make it a little better (just my opinion) but I do hope that you will hear what we are saying and take your help that we are offering. I would like to read more from you so please do post again soon, tell then be strong and God bless.
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Re: My Very Last Rhyme
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by attitudeangel1215 on
Thursday, 10th March 2005 @ 03:21:58 PM AEST
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| there is always someone wholl listen.....you just have to know who to ask..... |
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Re: My Very Last Rhyme
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by CrippinBabi513 on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 05:40:13 PM AEST
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I love how you expressed your emotional side... you may be lost now...but if you giv eit time you'll again find your way...hang in there...good poem...
* Babi |
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