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Verses of Truth?
Contributed by
essentially9
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Wednesday, 9th March 2005 @ 07:43:30 PM in AEST
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Verses of Truth?
The verses echo silently
And are heard vehemently.
No one believes
In your creed.
No one can see
A reason to be
In need.
I've been lost on my own way
And shadowed by the light of day.
Verses are written in blood stains
With a repetition at each refrain
By sorrowful tear splotches of pain.
Promised hope was never gained,
And the sun's light as waned.
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Re: Verses of Truth?
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by waos on
Wednesday, 9th March 2005 @ 07:51:17 PM AEST
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I'm not sure what to say but that I liked it. I thought the lines:
"I've been lost on my own way
And shadowed by the light of day."
were my favorite - definitely a really interesting look, very original thought.
Awesome job again - I always like to notice when you've posted stuff lol.
~Waos/Kara |
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Re: Verses of Truth?
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 9th March 2005 @ 08:17:13 PM AEST
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| Great write Jennifer. I respect all your comments made in the forum of recent on the religious question that was presented. Much peace to you. Laura |
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Re: Verses of Truth?
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th March 2005 @ 10:27:15 PM AEST
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"Verses are written in blood stains
With a repetition at each refrain
By sorrowful tear splotches of pain.
Promised hope was never gained,
And the sun's light as waned."
Wow....Beautifully written. |
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Re: Verses of Truth?
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by venkat on
Thursday, 10th March 2005 @ 12:41:41 AM AEST
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I like the concluding lines though each line is perfectly done..
" promised hope was never gained and
the sunlight as waned" -Thats a truth being exerienced by many of us..Jenni, I am really attracted to your poetry :-) venkat
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Re: Verses of Truth?
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by ForeverAlone on
Thursday, 10th March 2005 @ 12:45:03 AM AEST
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Yes Jen you once again smother another topic with your greatness...as always and once again with a great power
Clark |
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Re: Verses of Truth?
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 02:00:22 PM AEST
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| ooh, i liked this one. and again, it was especially the last verse because i have written about that myself at times. what a great way of addressing it here, the waning of the sun's light, promised hope, it was really handled well, you conveyed your ideas clearly and thoroughly. tasty :P |
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