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Saikuru I - (5 Raindrops)
Contributed by
Xnoybis
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Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 02:27:54 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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He stood in the rain
with the hope to imagine
what tears must feel like
Wrote words of wisdom
In the dirt on his blank face
All things speak silence
The Wind is a voice
That carries transmissions from
The hills of the past
Darkness is a cloak
Set to protect and attack
An owner and owned
Nature converges
The great symphony of Life
We all sing and dance
Copyright ©
Xnoybis
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2005-03-12 02:27:54]
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Re: Saikuru I - (5 Raindrops)
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 07:56:55 AM AEST
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Oooh, I like this. Especially the first stanza, I can really imagine that.
I think people have been here, too.
Great write,
If I could offer anything constructive it would be to make your stanzas add together better.
*hugs* Phil xx |
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