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Paper Roses
Contributed by
freckle
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Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 10:58:31 PM in AEST
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Paper Roses
Words on paper
Set in motion
Sights and sounds and smells
Feelings bloom like Springtime flowers
Underneath the waning moon
Tender leaves and twisting stalks
heavy flower heads,
sweet and musky
soft and pale
see the flowers bloom
Nighttime fragrance reaches out
touching lovers with a kiss
Morning's dawn reveals the splendor
dainty heads reach through the mist
People travel to and fro
so few take the time to see
"Take the time to smell the roses"
for they bloom for you and me.
Carol
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freckle
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2005-03-13 22:58:31]
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Re: Paper Roses
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 11:11:09 PM AEST
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This is absolutely gorgeous. Its written to perfection, flows smoothly and is perhaps one of the most beautiful writes I have read in a long while. Thanks for sharing.
Take Care Always
- Becca |
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Re: Paper Roses
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by tin on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 11:12:28 PM AEST
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| Wow great poem. it flows quite nicely |
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Re: Paper Roses
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 14th March 2005 @ 08:57:04 PM AEST
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Wow, this is stunning!
I agree with the comments above, this write flows smoothly and just so perfectly...
Beautiful word combinations too..
Very vivid pictures portrayed through here!
Great write :D
~kt |
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Re: Paper Roses
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 14th March 2005 @ 11:10:18 PM AEST
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very nice carol, softly treading from the heart . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Paper Roses
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 07:13:21 PM AEST
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Aww, Carol.
--Ghosty |
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Re: Paper Roses
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 02:50:43 PM AEST
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I really wanted the fifth line to end rhyming 'smells'. I think it would have made this piece very special, other than just plain 'special', which is a nice enough accolade in itself, I expect, but . . . I think you get my drift - I really appreciate the rhythm of this piece, it is soft and lulling.
Really fine read, Carol. |
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Re: Paper Roses
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 09:48:27 AM AEST
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Carol this was breathtaking, amazing poem sweetie. Im glad i got to read it.
Hugs,
Jane |
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Re: Paper Roses
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 04:47:25 AM AEST
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| Wow...... only statement I can think of.....wow!!! |
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Re: Paper Roses
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 07:37:36 PM AEST
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I tend to agree with Goose ... well and everybody else that chose to comment. Even with En Eff and thought that a rhyme while not essential there ... would have worked nicely.
( maybe ... as petals they soon fell ? )
( but then bloom would seem out of synch )
Never mind Carol ... pay no heed to my rambling. You did fabulous.
Nazzy ~
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