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whisper
Contributed by
Rxqueen
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Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 02:34:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
SecretLove
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you...
i don't know you
but you intruige the inner core of my conscienceness
awaken the breathe from inside
hiden I've been
out of touch
out of control
but you bring me to my knees
your breathe chains me to the words you whisper
you pacify
you satisfy
I give into
Latino lust,
and baby
in your eyes I trust
You are my peice on the side
and even though we have to hide
if I was ever found out and labeled a whore
baby, I'd still ache for more
and in the night sleeping next to him
I'd know you were no whim
I would whisper to myself
back in my personal hell
that you were worth every tainted kiss
and oh baby how i'd miss....
Copyright ©
Rxqueen
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2005-03-16 02:34:49]
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Re: whisper
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 02:46:12 AM AEST
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Ohh Joce this was really cute, he does sound yummy like you said.
Bring on the latino heat…lol.
I like it makes me wanna date again
Jane ^_^
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Re: whisper
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 06:12:49 AM AEST
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Oooh..what a lovely whisper "I give into
Latino lust, and baby in your eyes I trust"
very nicely written :-) venkat
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Re: whisper
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 11:32:33 AM AEST
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brilliant writing RX loved it!!!
pix xx |
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Re: whisper
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 11:35:46 AM AEST
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I was intrigued by the title the subtle word "Whisper".
As I read, I thought this had a lyrical feel to it and thought it had potential for song material.
We all have inner battles and conflicts but most can't be as graceful nor honest in penning them.
Impressive and unique.
I also liked the way you placed your thoughts, leading the reader onward, not dragging them---with a touch of longing and mystery..
Wow, is a good word for this one..
Kie |
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Re: whisper
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 02:04:55 PM AEST
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wow!!!!
Lucky guy!!
A passionate poetress you are!!!!
So well done! |
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Re: whisper
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by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 02:28:14 PM AEST
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I'm with Kie.... "Wow" seems appropriate here.
Damn you're brave... so much more than I. I've started at least three writes recently that were destined, it seems, for the premium section... and chickened out somewhere in the middle of each when I thought maybe I was being tooooo... um... explicit.
Maybe I should just try that thing you did at the end there... because... well.... I guess sometimes you don't actually have to say it! lol
with applause,
~Snemmy~ |
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Re: whisper
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by DorianChambers on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 03:18:35 PM AEST
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An exquisit peice of writting . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: whisper
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 06:16:27 PM AEST
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Uh, I don't think Venkat is latino.
But whatever.
Good stuff.
--Ghosty |
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Re: whisper
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 23rd March 2005 @ 01:34:19 AM AEST
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I'd say u got this one right on the money.
Very creative writing.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: whisper
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by Oceandreamer on
Wednesday, 28th March 2007 @ 02:55:03 PM AEST
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| Awesome write!Intense, strong and alive ... Your going places with this one!Keep writing. |
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