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Help Her Die
Contributed by
TheGrim
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Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 11:34:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Cut her,
Watch as she bleeds.
The deep cuts,
Are just what she needs.
Give her the pills,
To swallow one by one.
Until the time comes,
When her life is done.
Watch her lifeless body,
Swing from the noose above.
Now this world
Shes no longer a part of.
Help plan the funeral,
For her lost soul.
Say goodbye,
As shes lowered into the hole.
Copyright ©
TheGrim
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2005-03-16 23:34:33]
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Re: Help Her Die
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by ForeverAlone on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 11:38:52 PM AEST
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Hmmm.. Good but could have done something for the ending though, surprise, twist...yeah but still great job on the ryhme and structure..
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Re: Help Her Die
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 11:39:18 PM AEST
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Very sad but again u r a good writer. Try something positive, please, I bet you'd be great at it.
Hang in there, please.
huggs,
emy |
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