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memories attached to raindrops
Contributed by
summers
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Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 02:24:12 AM in AEST
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the most haunting vision ive had:
your face in the glass waving goodbye for the last time.
i refuse to let this happen
as i ride down to the creek tonight the rain bleeds in sympathy,
and its more than i asked for.
if this forest were like me it would remember every scratch,
all the plant life scorched to the ground.
ember after ember after ember.
but it doesnt,
and the rain doesnt help as it bleeds its false pity.
time seems to stop for the downpour.
this taunting rain sickens me.
its hollowed out the tip of my bullet and aimed for the bone.
it shreds through my skin and out the other side,
finally resting itself in the soil.
its an empty gesture.
i have your actions captured in a single silhouette,
but when the rain comes, i always forget.
so much rides on me making this right.
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summers
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Re: memories attached to raindrops
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by Tanmaya on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 02:48:02 AM AEST
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The words here are so deep, intense...
a very powerful write.
Every line seems to have so much within and and behind it.
Impactful and impressive. |
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Re: memories attached to raindrops
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 03:24:28 AM AEST
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| any person that makes you feel like that isnt worth letting yourself hurt, except of course when it comes to a child. Beautiful poem. And you seem sweet! |
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Re: memories attached to raindrops
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 09:38:00 AM AEST
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What a powerfull write, this was such a amazing write. More needs to see this.
Jane |
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Re: memories attached to raindrops
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 05:53:01 PM AEST
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Enjoyed it.
Keep writing, summers. |
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Re: memories attached to raindrops
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by allforyou on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 05:45:59 PM AEST
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I like your view of rain in this. Its something I haven't thought of before..."rain bleeds in sympathy"...thats awesome.
--Kara |
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Re: memories attached to raindrops
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by kleetas on
Thursday, 10th March 2011 @ 05:29:43 AM AEST
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| think higher thoughts of the memory beyond a single raindrop...think of every cell of your entire physical world and all the memories contained therein..the vastness of the physical and the empowerment of the mystical... |
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