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Birth of the Blue Print
Contributed by
Rxqueen
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Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 06:28:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Entangled in the jaded
faded haze
that plagues my mind,
the cluster F of distorted perceptions
interwoven like webs through neurons and cells,
a slight notion began to form
to spread
contagious.
a dingey fungus enveloping any slight possibility of pure
innocent thoughts.
consuming the entirity of my reasoning,
this unnatural blue brint swelled
feeding off what is only but a carcass of a soul.
DECIDED
not that there was a chance of choice in the matter
once the disease of your heart begins to gnaw and ravage your core of consciencness
there are no options
no control
you must feed the need
satisfy your growing embryo of hatred
IT WAS TO BE
)picture: The Birth Mschine, H.R. Geiger)
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Re: Birth of the Blue Print
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by UnlovedChild on
Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 07:11:20 PM AEST
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| Jocie , this was a very strong write. Well expressed emotions that were powerful. Great write. Love ya! |
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Re: Birth of the Blue Print
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by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 07:29:00 PM AEST
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I love this very powerful and and very darwinian, " ONCE THE DISEASE OF YOUR HEART BEGINS TO GNAW AND RAVAGE
YOUR CORE " u can write girl . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Birth of the Blue Print
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 07:53:55 PM AEST
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you must feed the need
satisfy your growing embryo of hatred
I think how strong this write is, and ripe with anger. You certainly make your point.
GRRRR. Keep writing. |
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Re: Birth of the Blue Print
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 02:58:19 AM AEST
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Biological in some regard.
The composition of organic matter is indeed complex, especially so within its networking…
Mind boggling, really!
You have demonstrated such in the most intriguing and creative way of expression.
Some scientific concepts remind me of the theories of evolution, including natural selection and such.
Some very beautiful metaphors, here, such as;
“a dingey fungus enveloping any slight possibility of pure
innocent thoughts.”
“you must feed the need
satisfy your growing embryo of hatred”
“this unnatural blue print swelled
feeding off what is only but a carcass of a soul.”
Such convoluted thinking.
“IT WAS TO BE”
-Suggests inevitability.
Inevitability of evolution or mutation?
In essence, mutation is evolution.
Perhaps a more inevitable artificiality post organic intervention.
Perchance, neither.
A dark muse, rather close to my heart.
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Re: Birth of the Blue Print
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 05:23:52 AM AEST
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Joce this was just outstanding. I'm clearly lost for words but damn that was good.
I like the wild vivid imagery that you are using and the metaphors our just amazing.
You're such an amazing writer.
Jane |
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Re: Birth of the Blue Print
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 23rd March 2005 @ 01:50:44 AM AEST
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Aww its amazing....powerful write..these lines are very impressive.."once the disease of your heart begins to gnaw and ravage your core of consciencness there are no options
no control you must feed the need"..:-) venkat
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Re: Birth of the Blue Print
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 10:44:15 PM AEST
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Your writing is very powerful
and stylish.
--Ghosty |
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