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Hollow
Contributed by
desecratedtears
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Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 11:13:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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dark nails of pain
pierce through my skin
blood like the velvet
that drapes your pale skin
crying your ocean
of corpse and decay
rip out my insides
put them out to lay
rip off my flesh
desecrate my soul
remind me off my punishment
let the pain flow
my desreving desires
for pain and distrust
hurt me like nightmares
ashes bring my dust
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desecratedtears
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2005-03-22 23:13:43]
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Re: Hollow
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 11:23:20 PM AEST
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| Welcome to this wonderful site. I enjoyed reading this poem of yours. Very dark and thought provoking. I really liked it. I look forward to reading many more of your writes. So keep it up! :-) |
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Re: Hollow
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by CrimsonTears on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 11:38:31 PM AEST
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welcome to YPDC!!!...this is a great poem...and i cant wait to read more....excellent job....keep up the good work
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
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Re: Hollow
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by Angelgirlprincess on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 11:39:27 PM AEST
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| To be perfectly honest, this isnt the time of poem that I normally like, but in good poems you can feel the emotion put into it. I felt it with this. Nice Job. Keep it up! |
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Re: Hollow
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by purplestary on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 11:48:59 PM AEST
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| welcome. great write. can't wait to read more. |
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Re: Hollow
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 23rd March 2005 @ 01:04:57 PM AEST
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I couldn't precisely say what you were trying to express in your poem but it just had a haunted feel to it. Like a chasm I can't even begin to imagine.
Welcome to YPDC.
Kie |
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Re: Hollow
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by SimplyMe on
Wednesday, 23rd March 2005 @ 07:15:14 PM AEST
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Welcome to the wonderful world of YPDC. We have some great poets on this site, and you appear to be one of them. You made sure you were noticed. Great poem. I look forward to more.
~Alucia~ |
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