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Nothing Special
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 12:03:41 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Swallow that bitter pill
That enables you to smile
Behind your bleeding wrists and empty eyes
Paste on that sick disguise
As you wander, alone, through your forest of lies
I am nothing, nothing special
Nothing but a sinner
Drunkenly giving in to these lies
I can't heal the ache
No matter how I choose to escape
I despise these feelings
And the thoughts that ensue
Perched above a cliff
About to give in
And let these tears rule
So cold and so alone
Wrists stapled together
Just to stop the bleeding
I told myself I wouldn't feel for you
But I can only lie to myself for so long
Because you don't need me
Though I still tell myself I need you
Entombed behind a wall of insecurity
I long to see your happiness
As I forsake my own
Give in to the disease of bitterness
As self-pity grows
Wipe away the persistent tears
From these swollen eyes
I am nothing, nothing special
I am nothing but a sinner
Swallow that bitter drink
That enables myself to frown
Behind my bleeding wrists and dangerous eyes
Paste on my sick disguise
As I wander, alone, through my forest of lies
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bobotheclown
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2005-03-24 00:03:41]
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Re: Nothing Special
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by write_whenit_hurts on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 12:08:51 AM AEST
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wow, nice very nice, i'm very impressed...i highly doubt that was put together in a cobbled way, it's too good! well, keep up the good work!
xoxo,
bRiAnNa |
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Re: Nothing Special
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by Gothchyk on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 12:14:38 AM AEST
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| It is good, i especially liked the first and last stanzas, it was a great way to start it and a great way to end it. |
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Re: Nothing Special
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 01:16:19 AM AEST
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| Brilliant piece of writing you have here. |
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Re: Nothing Special
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by Rxqueen on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 05:42:10 AM AEST
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Joel you rock. This was so powerful. I absolutely could feel the pain. It hit me hard in the face. Parts were very relatable which made your words real to me. I think you did an outstanding job sweetie. ANd I loved :
Entombed behind a wall of insecurity
I long to see your happiness
As I forsake my own
Give in to the disease of bitterness
As self-pity grows
It is so hard to love. You want that person to be happy, but as you state sometimes you must give up what you want in order for that to happen. It is a bittersweet thing, love. I hope you cheer up hun, but if not keep writing, this sht is killer. Loves it!
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Re: Nothing Special
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 05:22:16 AM AEST
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Joel, this was just an incredible write. It was powerful and it was written so well.
I don’t drink but I can somehow relate to this, everything about this was just perfect
I loved how your mind works and im glad I got to read this.
Because you don't need me
Though I still tell myself I need you
Entombed behind a wall of insecurity
I long to see your happiness
As I forsake my own
Give in to the disease of bitterness
As self-pity grows
Wipe away the persistent tears
From these swollen eyes
I am nothing, nothing special
I am nothing but a sinner
I can relate to those words so well, I still feel it everyday.
Thanks for sharing such an amazing work.
Jane |
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Re: Nothing Special
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by Soulless on
Sunday, 27th March 2005 @ 03:18:51 PM AEST
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BRAVO!! well done.
I love how you structured this poem. Although its nothing special in your eyes, it really hit me hard in other places. Simply beautiful construction and vivid wording.
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Re: Nothing Special
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 03:18:32 PM AEST
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Bitter and angry, yet so well poured onto the page.
Well done!!! |
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