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Blackened lace
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 12:21:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Darkness decends upon me,
Like a shroud of darkest lace,
Blinding, suffocating and,
Surrounding me with grace,
Trapping me inside myself,
Inside this fragile smile,
Protecting me from nothing,
But I'll stay here for a while.
Swallowing the memories,
Like bitter tasting brew,
But I keep regurgitating,
And the mess just looks like you,
So I'll sit here in the darkness,
Inside this precious nest,
For darkness binds, it blinds me,
From the things I can't express.
[I will sit here in this blackened lace,
At peace, my ache confined,
And pray for an escape...
From the darkness of my mind.
I know this changes nothing,
It won't help to always hide,
But sometimes just escaping,
Is doing what is right...]
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Re: Blackened lace
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by imalive_enoughsaid on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 12:29:56 PM AEST
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| wow..this is just so beautifyl and sad at the same time. you have a wonderful flow and i love the picture ..what a weird image that came to my head from these words... |
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by DorianChambers on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 12:31:56 PM AEST
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Your soul is showing beautiful write phill . . .
dorian Chambers |
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Re: Blackened lace
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 01:27:41 PM AEST
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OMG Philly!!!!
First of all I love the images you create, they are so vivid. Secondly the rhythem/cadence in this is one of my favorites. (it reminds me of many of my own) and lastly the whole idea of escape or time for ones self even knowing it will not solve all your problems....You nailed it!!!
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Re: Blackened lace
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by SimplyMe on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 01:50:35 PM AEST
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I too loved the picture, it's kinda disturbing in a way, but you can't help but look at it. You know sorta like a kid knowing not to play with fire, but yet they do. Not sure how good of a metaphor that was lol, but i tried. Anyways now i'm rambling. Great write as well. The picture sets the mood perfectly. Much love.
~Alucia~ |
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Re: Blackened lace
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 02:01:23 PM AEST
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Many people have found that escape can be as bad as facing the problem. It would surely depend on where you are escaping to and what you are using to get there. Knowing how ever that the problem will still be there is a sign that you won't escape too far or for very long. I really liked this Phil, well written and a lovely pic as well.
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Re: Blackened lace
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 02:06:09 PM AEST
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wow philly this piece is beautiful and kinda sad.and alittle dark.awsome just awsome.
I love this.
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Re: Blackened lace
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by Elayner27 on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 02:32:23 PM AEST
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| Wow, that is absolutly awesome! Excellent write. I love the way it flows and the visual and everything is just really really awesome. |
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Re: Blackened lace
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by Elayner27 on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 02:38:28 PM AEST
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| Wow, that is absolutly awesome! Excellent write. I love the way it flows and the visual and everything is just really really awesome. |
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Re: Blackened lace
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 03:14:43 PM AEST
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| Oh Phil, this was so emptionally appealing I had to comment on it. And the black lace is a fitting metaphoric device. Big hugs and I hope you findvthe best path for *you*. Jules ( from on the road in New Mexico). |
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Re: Blackened lace
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 03:45:37 PM AEST
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Phil this was just a beautiful, sad, emotive masterpiece.
The imagery you used here was just outstanding, i can honestly say each poem you do gets better and better.
I will sit here in this blackened lace,
At peace, my ache confined,
And pray for an escape...
From the darkness of my mind.
I know this changes nothing,
It won't help to always hide,
But sometimes just escaping,
Is doing what is right...]
Beautiful stanzas, i could so well relate to them.
Jane
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Re: Blackened lace
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by UnlovedChild on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 05:20:30 PM AEST
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| This is a beautiful and emotional poem. Very well written and creatively expressed. Good job! |
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Re: Blackened lace
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by Les4567 on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 10:14:07 PM AEST
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Phil very nice write. It spoke to me in a sense. I really liked it. Won't be the last poem that i read by you. You are good writer.
~Les |
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Re: Blackened lace
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by mina-1 on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 12:47:01 AM AEST
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wow, Phil this is an absolutely sad, but very captivating write. The image u cast is so vivid and so deep. It flows so well and the picture used tops it off. Well done, Phil. A true master piece so brillantly written.
Hugs,
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by Willofree on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 06:19:35 PM AEST
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Beautifully written with a sad lament. I really like the flow and the message. I think you display a lot of wisdom. You realize hiding will not resolve anything; but are also aware that you have to pick the time and place when you are ready. Life is sort of a game of poker. You need to know when to hold them and when to fold them. Trust your intuition.
Well done!
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Re: Blackened lace
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 10:47:43 AM AEST
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"But I keep regurgitating,
And the mess just looks like you"
What disturbing pictures you paint on my mind's canvas. Although disturbing, vivid and metaphoric.
Another colourful muse desipte the obscurity of darkness which seems to haunt and plague.
"Blackened Lace"... beautiful...
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Re: Blackened lace
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 27th March 2005 @ 11:18:12 PM AEST
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| ::applauds:: i absolutely loved every verse of this phil. so well expressed and written. your talent was clearly shone. which must be hard since you have so much of it =] from the first line i knew that this would be a brilliant poem. |
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Re: Blackened lace
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 06:48:35 PM AEST
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Dark and intense this certainly is. And the picture is amazing. I just hope things aren't very dark, very often.
Another excellent piece, my friend.
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Re: Blackened lace
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by glu1 on
Saturday, 7th May 2005 @ 03:18:01 PM AEST
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Fantastic
Such powerful imagery and emotion
Great write
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