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Living, Cutting, and Getting Through It
Contributed by
Ataraxia
on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 07:31:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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The bad times
Will always come and go
And still you
Keep your head low
Think ahead
Twenty years from now
Will doing it
Make you proud?
Would you rather say
To someone you meet,
I cut myself every night
Until I fall alseep?
Or would you rather smile
And tell them,
I was depressed
But then I got over it?
Yeah, so its addictive
Im sure
But dont tell me
That theres not a cure
Its all in your mind
So it cant control you
Youre too good
To let it have a hold on you
Its mental, not physical
Please get some help
If its ruining your life
Dont keep it to yourself
But maybe if you change
Your attitude
You wont be dependant
And itll be over soon
Now, dont go rolling
Your eyes at me
Im not telling you to smile
When you feel like crying
Im just saying if you look
At the good things you have
Maybe the bad things
Wont seem sowell, bad
And compare yourself
To people who are starving
Someone with no family
Or someone living on the streets
You have food in your stomach
A roof over your head
So dont make a broken heart
Be the cause of your death
You were put on this earth
For a reason
I wont get philisophical
I dont know what you believe in
But you werent born
To die this way
Your time will come
Meanwhile, please stay
Your life means something
I believe this strongly
And if you ever need to talk
Simply tag me
Ill help you through
Because thats what Im here for
I hope that this poem
Has opened some doors
Copyright ©
Ataraxia
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2005-03-26 19:31:59]
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Re: Living, Cutting, and Getting Through It
(User Rating: 1 )
by AutomaticTLC on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 07:38:39 PM AEST
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Now, don’t go rolling
Your eyes at me
I’m not telling you to smile
When you feel like crying
I’m just saying if you look
At the good things you have
Maybe the bad things
Won’t seem so…well, bad
I don't like those two stanza's. If you take them out the poem flows better. It's REALLY GOOD though and since I'm against cutting it might be bias. But you get a 4 ^_^ |
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Re: Living, Cutting, and Getting Through It
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by Avernus on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 08:00:50 PM AEST
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| I felt there were a few parts that could maybe have been left out but it is still very nice work. I am a former cutter and have friends that still are, it is very hard to get through to someone when they are in they state of mind and I think every little bit helps |
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Re: Living, Cutting, and Getting Through It
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by blue_angel on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 09:29:02 PM AEST
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| i think its rilly good... a couple parts u could have gone without but, being a cutter myself, ur poem has inspired me... ive been trying to stop, and it is hard... very hard and its physical and mental... but very well written poem. |
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Re: Living, Cutting, and Getting Through It
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by thepizzaguy on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 09:42:43 PM AEST
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| Personally I liked the poem, you stayed on the message and for the most part (not the whole thing, though) it was positive. Good writing. |
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