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The Whisper
Contributed by
Greenlee
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Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 11:22:49 AM in AEST
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Beautiful fragility
As he speaks softly
As he looks so broken
My mind is full of wonder
When I hear him whisper
But I hope I never know
Pain filled perfection
That's what I see in him
Iconic obsession
Was the source of my love for him
His beauty was resurrected
From that one September day
And he's too good for a mortality
Because unlike us he belongs only to himself.
I stopped crying after two weeks
Because of our sudden goodbye
I'll forever consider it our last kiss
When he stopped with just a smile.
We were doing so well in our painful way
But they pulled him from the bottom of the lake
Isn't that why I fell for the beauty of his flaws?
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Greenlee
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2005-03-29 11:22:49]
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Re: The Whisper
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 12:13:19 PM AEST
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I love this, it is a stunning piece of writing, Sad, but still wonderful..
I especially loved that last stanza.
Great write,
Phil |
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Re: The Whisper
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 12:31:31 PM AEST
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written beautifully... heartwrenching... my best to you and warm welcome to ypdc:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: The Whisper
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by Greenlee on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 12:46:41 PM AEST
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thanks for the comments. I appreciate them
nessa:
I believe that you've commented some of my old old poetry from when I used to be at the site before and I appreciate it just the same |
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Re: The Whisper
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by Overstated on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 12:55:24 PM AEST
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| excellent poem i couldnt of told that this was 3 seperate poems except maybe the last stanza which stood out- did enjoy reading this poem- I loved lines about iconic obessions and the importance of the whisper. nice work. |
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Re: The Whisper
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 05:59:15 PM AEST
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| Powerful and incredibly sad. A wonderful write. Five stars from me. |
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