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Love and Passion
Contributed by
thepizzaguy
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Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 07:25:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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You seemed nice at the start
When everything was relaxed
Everything was perfect,
back in those days.
But then he came along, and
like a hawk, grabbed you by the heart.
It's funny how you didn't tell me that part.
Those summer nights got hotter and hotter,
as the passion between us,
reached an all time high.
And then you left me for him.
And I learned a lesson.
That passion doesn't always equal love...
...And sometimes "I love you"...
...doesn't mean "I love you" at all...
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thepizzaguy
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2005-03-31 19:25:41]
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Re: Love and Passion
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 09:08:56 PM AEST
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Yeah, I feel ya, dawg.
You can try not to,
but eventually you just have to vent.
--Ghost |
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Re: Love and Passion
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 10:05:57 PM AEST
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oh yeah...i soo agree
thanku for sharing and i hope u r ok..i kno wat thats like only recenlty going thorough it myself and i HAD to vent...i didnt hav the courage to talk to him
anyway well done |
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Re: Love and Passion
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by freckle on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 10:35:15 PM AEST
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Ooooh, good one...And I learned a lesson.
That passion doesn't always equal love...We all need to learn that lesson at one time unfortunately! Good write.....keep 'em coming!
Carol |
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Re: Love and Passion
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by Evshrug on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 07:11:12 PM AEST
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Obviously she wasn't dedicated (I was shocked that He cheated on Her!), and so she best serves your life as a lesson to learn. Hopefully you never take it upon yourself to see what her perspective was like...
Here, poetically, you use more ideas and expressions than straight words, which is good. You ended with a bang again, so you perform the rising climax alright. Maybe you could experiment writing a poem using the least words possible, but still get your point off with feeling. This poem is dusted with that magic that leaves the reader shivering or feeling sad, but you can still do better! Go speed racer! |
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