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thoughts and more thoughts
Contributed by
In_a_While
on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 09:05:05 AM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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have you the time, to be told in rhyme
that love is the rain that is cold
listen in silence, be told the violence
that heartbreak is achingly old
i don't want a stain, showing cold pain
so keep cold hands off my heart
with dark lakes under, sharks make me wonder
is depression the egg of my art?
want pictures to see, with dead pigs trying to flee
from trees that do grab at the skin
a sky black and blue, shaped clouds around you
the disease is what eats you within
she is a calm heart, he is a gone heart
love is what makes us believe
she is in heartache, he is the hearbreak
love is what we will grieve...
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In_a_While
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2005-04-01 09:05:05]
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Re: thoughts and more thoughts
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by Rhymingron on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 10:51:44 AM AEST
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| I really like this one. The flow, the rhymn made this an enjoyable read. A real good poem. |
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Re: thoughts and more thoughts
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by brokengirl on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 11:21:54 AM AEST
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| I really like the rhyming of this poem. It was a fun one to read and I liked it. keep up the good writing. |
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Re: thoughts and more thoughts
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by rcav8ing on
Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 02:35:49 PM AEST
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I like your limerick style and the words mean so much. Thanks for the enjoyable poems.
Jeff |
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Re: thoughts and more thoughts
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by sride686 on
Friday, 29th April 2005 @ 11:31:37 AM AEST
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| This was a good write and I like your writing still in the pieces I’ve read so fare. You have such a deeper meaning in a lot of your writes. When you write it sounds like it is your true thoughts and emotion dumping out on the page you write. I enjoyed this write as well as the rest and the last stanza was really strong and it made it that much better to end on such a strong note. Take care and let me know when you have new writes coming out….Steve |
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