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Degraded Effort
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
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Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 10:19:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Dergraded effort
As the wounds start to hurt
Baring the soul inside
Hearing the screams cried
The cold metal
Without a score to settle
As I plead for an encore
The blood and pain I want more
Everytime I ease the pain
There comes more for me to sustain
Along with the forever scars
Like the home I subside in, but of bars
They are my past
And forever they will last
You say I am the only one
That has created my burden
But its really your fault
Because you're the one who took my wounds
And added the salt!
Copyright ©
ForeverAlone
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2005-04-01 22:19:38]
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Re: Degraded Effort
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 10:34:29 PM AEST
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| oh, very nice indeed. reminds me of chevelle and my favorite song by them. "god, the listless sea...the salt enters the wound" im glad that i saw this one, makes me think that this is even better than the cowrite. =] but the way were working on it, the cowrite will never be finished! |
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Re: Degraded Effort
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by mina-1 on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 10:44:27 AM AEST
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A really great write filled with alot of emotion. i loved the way it flowed and the way it was portrayed. Well done.
Hugs,
Sue |
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Re: Degraded Effort
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by BrokenAngel on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 07:19:26 PM AEST
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| Wonderful job writing this. |
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Re: Degraded Effort
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by white_tiger on
Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 09:36:58 PM AEST
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thats a kool poem.....:) i lyk the different stanzas and stuff....they's kool o_) yeh, anyway, great stuff....
huggs and keep smiling
white_tiger |
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