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Wind the Spiral
Contributed by
Xnoybis
on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 05:10:57 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Let's take a ride
This trip of humanity
Take it in
to the end
And see all there is to see
Let's get together
Push it for it's worth
Take it in
To the end
And live a new birth
Let's help each other
Up to the next level
See it all
Rise and fall
A true gift to revel
Let's clasp and entwine
Spin each other to peaks
See it all
Rise and fall
And find what she speaks
Let's each pave the way
For the other's ascend
Live it
And die it
The beginning at the end
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Xnoybis
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2005-04-02 05:10:57]
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Re: Wind the Spiral
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 07:56:32 AM AEST
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Oooh, I like this, It's something different.
I think the repeating lines work really well and don't make it annoying, as some repeated lines can.
I like this:
Let's clasp and entwine
Spin each other to peaks
See it all
Rise and fall
And find what she speaks
Great write,
Phil
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Re: Wind the Spiral
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by Jackee_line on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 10:11:47 AM AEST
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| well done , great write |
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