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December Rain
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 03:07:52 PM in AEST
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In her favorite rocking chair
she sits brushing silver hair
watching as December rains turn into snow
She remembers younger days
that have vanished in the haze
with the friends and lovers that she used to know
Cup of coffee in her hand
things didn't turn out like she'd planned
takes another sip and thinks about her past
How the moments turned to years
and the smiles turned into tears
can't imagine how her life has gone so fast
Once upon a day gone by
she could catch a young mans eye
turning heads and winning hearts were only games
Memories passing in a blur
now she can't recall for sure
all the places or the faces nor the names
So she gives a sigh and stands
holds the cup in shaky hands
walking slowly from the window by her chair
Drops the brush upon the floor
opens up her bedroom door
starts to cry because she has no one to care
Lying down upon her bed
rests her old and tired head
wishing for an end to all her lonely pain
Closes eyes and falls asleep
this, the last time she will weep
Soul released to vanish with December rain
L. Carling c2005
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Re: December Rain
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 03:37:23 PM AEST
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Larry, this was such a beautiful write,
It's mellow and amazing.
All i can say is WOW
Jane |
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Re: December Rain
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by hooray_its_jen on
Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 03:38:34 PM AEST
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This is so sad, but the way you wrote it makes it seem...peaceful, in a sense.
Awesome write (as always)
~Jenna |
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Re: December Rain
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by ElevenToedSloth on
Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 03:39:39 PM AEST
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| Tallented, you are :) |
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Re: December Rain
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 03:50:13 PM AEST
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Oh Larry.........
I actually haven't any idea how to comment here... except to say... (as I think you once did on one of mine) that this - hit hard. Wow, yeh.... it's... heartbreaking.
Structurally appealing... though I barely noticed for the emotional response that I had to this one. Well done, as always, Larry...
~SNM~ |
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Re: December Rain
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 03:59:51 PM AEST
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WOW!!! Amazing how you do this....
All I am gonna say is...I AM SO GLAD THAT YOU HAVE RETURNED TO GRACE US WITH YOUR BEAUTIFUL WORK!!!
WOW!!!
Jenni |
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Re: December Rain
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by JacobsKK on
Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 04:18:53 PM AEST
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| What a good poem. Good imagery. :-) |
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Re: December Rain
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by mina-1 on
Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 07:34:16 PM AEST
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This is such an outstanding write. Sad, but beautifully conveyed. A brillant piece of poetry wriiten so well. An awesome write.
Hugs,
Sue |
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Re: December Rain
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 12:47:45 AM AEST
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A beautiful poem that touches the heart in a
sad but necessary way dipicting the tides of
life . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: December Rain
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 01:08:38 AM AEST
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My friend this gave me chills... you have
painted a wonderful, but terribly sad story in
this poem. Just wow yeah I also liked how it
flowed and how it was set out and the
imagery... dude the next 2 drinks are on me.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: December Rain
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by bernard on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 03:38:36 AM AEST
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| Good Poem but sad, very sad 5/5 bernard, |
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Re: December Rain
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by sweetangeluk on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 09:50:37 AM AEST
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How very sad made me cry reading these words.
A lonlely woman on here own with no one to care for her. You painted a true story of how life is for someone living alone and feeling very sad.
Beautiful touching so heartbreaking
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: December Rain
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by Kie on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 10:51:48 AM AEST
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L- I really battled tears on this one.
Its beautiful yet it breaks my heart.
Kie |
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Re: December Rain
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by shelby on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 03:08:08 PM AEST
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this reached out and slapped me! Woaww again you brought me to tears and at the end of my seat. Sadly in this life it is very realistic
Michelle |
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Re: December Rain
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 04:22:16 PM AEST
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Incredable!!
Floews wonderfully and filled with emotional punch!
Keep 'em coming!! |
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Re: December Rain
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by Merry on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 07:07:14 PM AEST
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A beautiful write - very sad - full of strong images
great work Larry
Bravo
merry |
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Re: December Rain
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 08:32:57 PM AEST
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ohhh larry! a masterpiece for sure! i believe this is the best youve written, your style, flow and stanzas are perfect, and the story of her life is soooo moving! bravo and *raises her lighter* i Love it!!! hugs n' love nessa
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Re: December Rain
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by OnAngelswings on
Wednesday, 4th May 2005 @ 08:10:02 AM AEST
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| I am not real sure what to say other thatn...so sad but wonderful....I'm so sorry...Your in my pryaers Larry....As always a wonderful write...Shari :) |
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Re: December Rain
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 02:22:36 PM AEST
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So heartbreaking....its something that just gets in a depressing mood so fast...just awesome work tho..beautiful in its own way too
~Clark |
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