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Rose of Innocence
Contributed by
essentially9
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Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 09:38:10 PM in AEST
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Rose of Innocence
The beautiful rose is desecrated.
The thorns bleed the life that's wasted
By the one that pricks their finger
Till the pain started to linger.
The rose is given life
When the sun no longer sheds its light.
The darkness covets the dew stricken petals
Until the wanton want for blood settles.
The dawn brings death to everything
With rays that shadow what could be.
The thorns still drip the blood from the other morn
From those who placed the crown of thorns
On the one who was later adorned.
The darkness now covets what was lost,
And the loss of life is what it costs.
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essentially9
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Re: Rose of Innocence
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 09:42:23 PM AEST
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| Sad...but really well written(as per usual) nice job! |
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Re: Rose of Innocence
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by lost13 on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 09:43:42 PM AEST
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wow this was really deep. it was an interesting read.
lost13
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Re: Rose of Innocence
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by ForeverAlone on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 09:45:46 PM AEST
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Very dark and demented that is very bold and beautiful.....Very well done Jen..=]
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Re: Rose of Innocence
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by FearMyRawr on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 09:59:40 PM AEST
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| Nice imagery... beautiful. |
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Re: Rose of Innocence
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by sicknivesevered on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 12:06:43 AM AEST
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| Bloody rose... hrmm... very good. (^_^)b |
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Re: Rose of Innocence
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 01:10:58 AM AEST
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I don't know if this was mocking Christianity
or not, but I thought this was written rather
oddly yet I liked how it was put together. It
was very good and I liked the imagery.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Rose of Innocence
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 08:04:06 AM AEST
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wow that was amazingly written,brilliant poem,
pix xx |
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Re: Rose of Innocence
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 04:22:05 PM AEST
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Jen you cow you always do know how to make me wanna write like you LOL.
I liked this a lot ,sorry for not commenting much it just keeps me from stratching my eyes out with you're utter brilliance.
Jane
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Re: Rose of Innocence
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 01:58:19 AM AEST
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| Amazing piece..excellent flow...but it is dripping with blood of innocent rose. :-) venkat |
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Re: Rose of Innocence
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by fielding88 on
Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 08:24:28 PM AEST
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| The regret you came up with was so beautifully done, which is such a sensible conclusion to the piece you've written here. Very descriptive as well, as the image of red is so clearly conveyed in those stanzas, coupled with the darkness. Hopefully I know who you're talking about in this poem, but to avoid pointing out my stupidity, ill just say it tasted great and leave now : ) :P |
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