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Empty!
Contributed by
Unaekseveer1
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Sunday, 21st July 2002 @ 09:55:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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From the moment we parted,
All those years ago,
Ive felt somethings missing,
I thought you should know.
From the shock when I wake up
In the cold morning light,
Till the time when I kiss
Your photo goodnight.
I think of you always,
When Im out in the car,
I drive and I drive
Never getting very far.
When I sit to watch t.v.
With my coffee and biscuit,
I think should I do it,
Buy a ticket and risk it.
Then Im sad when I realise
That I just cant afford,
To fly out and kiss you
All those miles abroad.
Im so sorry my sweet,
I am such a fool,
I should be there with you,
Burning by the pool.
I should have said yes
When you asked me to go,
A regrettable act,
Unforgivable I know.
All I can think of
Is holding your hand,
Life here without you
Just seems so un-grand.
Well I think thats enough
Feeling sorry for myself,
All of this moping
Cant be good for my health.
This poem should finish
With a bit of a laugh,
But nothing appears
To rhyme, except bath.
Now Im thinking of you
Soaking in the tub,
I jump in as well
But my butt grabs the plug.
See
EMPTY!
Copyright ©
Unaekseveer1
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2002-07-21 21:55:45]
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Re: Empty!
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by Rose on
Monday, 22nd July 2002 @ 01:56:49 AM AEST
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| Well, I have to say, that you did make me laugh on your last verse!! :) You know how we all learn from our past. Wishing we had done those things, or did!!! NIce write though. I enjoy looking back on my writes. I see what I had seen then, perhaps not looking at the write thru the same eyes as before. Amber Rose :) |
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Re: Empty!
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Thursday, 25th July 2002 @ 12:42:10 PM AEST
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Hi Rose, Looking back seems to be most of what I do at the moment, when it comes to love! I can't seem to imagine myself without this particular Woman, I like to say I'm over her but I find it hard to write new stuff! Rhyming things anyway!
Kind regards
Dean ;-) |
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Re: Empty!
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by ShadowsCloud on
Sunday, 17th November 2002 @ 10:42:03 AM AEST
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Great poem Dean, you certainly did end it with a laugh.
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Re: Empty!
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Monday, 18th November 2002 @ 10:07:01 AM AEST
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Hey Candice,
It seems you like my writing, if only you could see the smile that knowing this gives my mush!
Thankyou again for your lovely kind comment.
With love
Dean:-) |
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Re: Empty!
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by ShadowsCloud on
Monday, 18th November 2002 @ 11:08:46 AM AEST
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Dean, I really do like your writing. I only comment on the stuff I like. And your writing is very good.
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