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Learning to breathe
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 09:02:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Some days I wonder,
Just what would happen,
If I held my breath,
And just never let it go...
(And then sometimes....
....I think I should just try)
And other days I wonder,
If we really do need daylight,
Or if the dark would be better,
So we would never know,
If what we wanted,
Was right in front of us.
And without the air,
Without the light,
I could be fine, maybe,
Nothing would matter anymore,
Nothing would hurt.
It would just...be..
And sometimes I wish...
I could watch,
As invisible nothings,
Would fly in front of my eyes.
Tiny little specks of now,
Distracting me,
From the suffocating air...
[But I know,
That I need to breathe...]
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by UnlovedChild on
Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 09:11:37 PM AEST
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| Very touching and beautiful. Great write. |
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by emystar on
Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 09:13:27 PM AEST
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Thought provoking write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by pixie on
Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 09:15:33 PM AEST
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funny as I am just litening to a song called Breathe by sean paul and blue cantrell. emotionally penned from a heart that needs some love and a heart that has had a hard time , Philly you express feelings deep inside your osul very well, you are an exeptional poetess and a great friend to me. your work is loved by many, I just hope that one day I will read something happy from you, so I know that you have found someone who can put dance back into your soul
pix xx |
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by mina-1 on
Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 11:17:26 PM AEST
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Phil this is just sensational. A real thought provoking write. An outstanding piece of poetry from a very talented young lady.
May ur heart be lifted from the burdens that dwell within it.
Hugs,
Sue |
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by DorianChambers on
Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 11:25:15 PM AEST
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This is a lovely peice of writting phill, very
captivating 2 read, once again u set the
wheels of poetic imagination in motion . . .
********** Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 04:35:31 AM AEST
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That was beautiful Phil ... you ever decide to try and hold your breath that long and I'll poke you ... See * lifts pokie finger * You better not try it ... I'll do it I swear. Take a big breath of air and back away from the dark !!!
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 12:14:33 PM AEST
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Gosh.
I go to that place myself sometimes... sometimes not even knowing why. I wrote Wanting Not The Light a long while back... I'm not thrlled with the piece.. but something about it... well... still hits me the way this one does.
This piece is more relatable to me than some of your others. i don't know if that's why I like it so much... but, I absolutely do. Of course, your thought processes may have been quite different than my own as you wrote this... but... regardless, I can lose myself in this.
*hugs*
~Snem~
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by Kie on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 12:49:51 PM AEST
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I sat here and absorbed your poem for about fifteen minutes. It says so much and its beyond the term "poetical".
Its those invisible ponderings, the depth that most cannot pen nor ponder.
I was simply, amazed.
Kie |
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 14th April 2005 @ 12:22:42 PM AEST
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There is something captivating about yout poem. In a profound way it seems to deal with one's state of mind.... your state of mind?
One needs to breath to exist.... one needs to want to breath to live. To feel our pain is to be alive, no matter how bad it hurts. I hope i'm not off base here, or preachy.
Great poem
Hope things are ok, Will |
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by persia on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 09:43:59 AM AEST
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breath-taking!
PERSIA |
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by Sensommar on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 03:53:30 AM AEST
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| How close can you get ..and still be you ...Painfully beautiful poetry here ...I love it !! Thank you for reviewing my poem Moonleaves With love Pia |
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:44:53 PM AEST
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This is really thought-provoking.... Just WHAT do we really NEED......
Interesting write..
Jenni |
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Re: Learning to breathe
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 12:58:08 PM AEST
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phil, this is sooo excellent, beyond beautiful with such breathtakingly vivid images that are heart-stopping..... hugs n' love nessa
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