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All the While
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 11:28:04 AM in AEST
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When the darkness gains its hold
When the wind blows bitter cold
When the light seems far away
And you long to see the day
Keep the faith and keep your smile...
I am with you all the while
There in stars that shine above
Twinkling in a dance of love
When life's struggle hold you down
When laughter turns into a frown
When your soul is tired and weak
Simple peace of mind you seek
As you face each painful trial...
I am with you all the while
Whispering if you'll just hear
Calming all your doubt and fear.
When you feel alone and lost
Spirit weak and tempest tossed
Close your eyes and free your heart...
I've been there right from the start
Standing near when you would sigh
Holding you when you would cry
Guarding you with strength and guile
I am with you all the while
L. Carling c2005
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Rakerman1999
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Re: All the While
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by pixie on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 12:17:55 PM AEST
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Awww Larry that was so beautiful, really lovely. great write
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Re: All the While
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 01:50:29 PM AEST
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A really comforting write, Larry....
Well done!!
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Re: All the While
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by Kie on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 03:22:00 PM AEST
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This poem just blanketed me in a feeling of peace. "All the while" has to be the perfect title to summarize this poem.
How do you do it, over and over with such high quality poetry?
I don't know but the next time you feel inspired maybe it will pass you by and head my way.
Kie (Who's hoping for a shift in breeze)
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Re: All the While
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 04:10:28 PM AEST
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Excellent work from one of the poetry pillars of YPDC. Fine rhythm and rhyme, and nicely done.
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Re: All the While
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 06:06:38 PM AEST
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This is gorgeous. Just gorgeous, Larry.
Abeautiful, loveing write, stunning as usual.
You are, in my opinion, one of the best writers on this site, Larry.
Great work,
*hugs* Phil xxx
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Re: All the While
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 08:10:43 PM AEST
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Larry ... that was just ... lovely. I am awed.
Perfect in rhyme and form. Another triumphant write my friend.
* throwing roses *
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: All the While
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by Whisper on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 08:26:20 PM AEST
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That was a wonderful write it can cast visions of so many circumstances. Excellent rythm and flow. Descriptive words never more true, taking me away . I truly enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.
Whisper |
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Re: All the While
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 04:06:34 AM AEST
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wow beautiful write.
As always. |
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Re: All the While
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by DorianChambers on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 09:15:25 AM AEST
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ah my friend lary, always a joy 2 read your
writting not 2 mention a learning experience
like your style take care . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: All the While
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 10th April 2005 @ 01:20:32 AM AEST
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Thank you for sharing this Larry it really
spoke to me and encouraged me although I
don't think you wrote it to me lol. Also, it was a
bit longer than what u usually write which
was also good. Keep up the good writing
buddy.
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Re: All the While
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by Arsenic on
Monday, 11th April 2005 @ 05:19:22 PM AEST
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Nicely done! I like the topic and structure. Did you mean "with strength and guile"? Guile just brings to mind someone being disingenuous or deceitful...reversal of what I had been reading in the poem. What am I missing?
Good Job.
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Re: All the While
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by girltranscended on
Saturday, 16th April 2005 @ 02:34:43 PM AEST
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When you feel alone and lost
Spirit weak and tempest tossed
Guarding you with strength and guile
I am with you all the while
Your wording here is simply fabulous. The content, the style, again a sense of calmness - this was wonderful to read. I wish (although too terribly taxing) that you could be this strength for everyone, but maybe for everyone who comes here to read, you are.
:)
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Re: All the While
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 7th May 2005 @ 07:26:32 PM AEST
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I'm with Kie and my sister ('girltranscended'.. who, btw, I didn't lead here --- she discovered you all on her own she did)... this piece... emits a sense of comfort, peace. From a woman's perspective... it's akin to having a man, a caring man, wrap his arms around you at the precise moment that you wish he would.
Lovely, Larry. *sigh* Yes... very much so.
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Re: All the While
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 02:12:43 PM AEST
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thats so beautiful...and so caring, Awsome job...
~Clark |
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Re: All the While
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by emystar on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 02:03:16 AM AEST
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and they keep getting even mo beautifull.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: All the While
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by vibes2go on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 08:59:34 PM AEST
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| tears again. beautiful .. a poem every woman would love to have written to her .. inspires an ache deep inside .. |
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