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Weathering the Storm
Contributed by
essentially9
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Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 08:57:43 PM in AEST
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Weathering the Storm
The flower glistens in the morning dew,
With the rays of sunlight shining through
The clouds filled with sorrow and pain.
That disappear with each drop of rain.
The flower starts to wither into desecration,
Like my blackened heart with it's unused passion.
The wilted petals fall gracefully onto the ground
Without a sound upon the newly dug mound.
The petals then scatter with the blowing breeze
That takes them away never to again be seen.
The life that held the flower dear is no more,
Because the rays of sunlight only shine for
Those able to weather the storm.
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Re: Weathering the Storm
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by Cupid on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 09:12:08 PM AEST
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I like the rhyme in this poem.
I'm not sure what else to say as I am speechless.
This is so.... what's the word I'm looking for.... melancholy yet satisfying. If this poem were a sandwich, I'd be full off of it for the rest of the day.
Good job, essentially9! |
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Re: Weathering the Storm
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by ForeverAlone on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 10:01:55 PM AEST
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Beautiful Poem Jen....very descriptive and really makes me want to hope....even though you will say something that says hope is worthless.....lol...great job....
Clark...=] |
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Re: Weathering the Storm
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by TheVoice on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 10:07:37 PM AEST
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The emotions run strong in this outstanding write! I, after reading this am not sure I could weather the storm.
The Voice
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Re: Weathering the Storm
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by DorianChambers on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 12:13:03 AM AEST
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A great poem survial of the fittest struck at me
right off the bat excellant peice of poetry . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Weathering the Storm
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by tx_graffiti_gal on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 09:42:00 PM AEST
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Didn't think I could cry over a flower..
Wanting to stand strong against the storm wanting to grow and express it's love to all but is torn and shaken not able to survive... wow.. |
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Re: Weathering the Storm
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 11:17:58 PM AEST
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Wow! I'm just totally taken back by the end of the first stanza above all things! I was just awestruck by it, because it sounds so poetic and is just genius:
The clouds filled with sorrow and pain.
That disappear with each drop of rain.
Brilliant, just absolutely brilliant. The last line too, which is so true, and a concept that I love to play with at times, but probably doesnt come out in the same strength and manner as your write here. Well done |
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Re: Weathering the Storm
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by venkat on
Monday, 11th April 2005 @ 01:48:27 AM AEST
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Excellent description..."the petals then scatter with blowing breeze...the flower is no more"
Oh..such are our life's memories..Totally beautiful captivating poem:_)venkat |
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