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The Dream Catcher
Contributed by
essentially9
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Thursday, 14th April 2005 @ 10:05:25 PM in AEST
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The Dream Catcher
The azure waves of lasting despair Envelope the heart of the ocean So that the salty sea air Blows unemotional Without care.
The equilibrium no longer reflects As the air darkens into a transparent mist. Neither the sky nor the ocean is able to be seen As dreams end on whims of star dust flecks Of hopes far more grander than this, Because dreams are only dreams.
If only the heart of despair Was not suffocated to its death Under the lifeless waves that cared Nothing, but to take the heart's last breath As it sank deeper than the reach of the sun's glare.
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Re: The Dream Catcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by UnlovedChild on
Thursday, 14th April 2005 @ 10:13:06 PM AEST (User
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Very nice, strong poem. Wonderful write, Jen. |
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Re: The Dream Catcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by ForeverAlone on
Thursday, 14th April 2005 @ 10:22:48 PM AEST (User
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Well Jen...this is a different side of you..the structure and flow are nothing I have read of you before...The thought though is nothing less then extrordanary and outstanding...It took a few times reading it to understand fully...still trying to figure out if I have all it says...Jen...you have an amazing Poem, that is greatly different from your norm...
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Re: The Dream Catcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by DorianChambers on
Thursday, 14th April 2005 @ 11:06:34 PM AEST (User
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A very beautiful poem i love your style, you
write so well . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: The Dream Catcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by lost13 on
Thursday, 14th April 2005 @ 11:09:16 PM AEST (User
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this was such a good poem. i reallly loved it. it was deep.
~*lost*~ |
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Re: The Dream Catcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 12:28:12 AM AEST (User
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Awesome write, my friend.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: The Dream Catcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by Xsitm on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 12:59:17 AM AEST (User
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Great poem, really enjoyed it..
Ryan |
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Re: The Dream Catcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by venkat on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 01:25:00 AM AEST (User
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Marvellous poem.. wonderfully poetic..I really enjoyed its read..:-) venkat |
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Re: The Dream Catcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 01:32:19 AM AEST (User
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This is such a beautiful poem. I love the ryme scheme and the images i got in my mind as i read it . Thank you
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Re: The Dream Catcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 05:27:03 PM AEST (User
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the intense tones in your writing keep myu attention another great write from you
( Michelle slaps a bug)
(( JK))
Michelle |
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Re: The Dream Catcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by fielding88 on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 07:51:01 PM AEST (User
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If I haven't said this before, you're extremely versatile in your subject matter. I don't think I've read anything quite like this before, it was truly well done!
Because dreams are only dreams
lol, i love this the most because i disagree with it the most. then again, that may be because i'm more of an optimist. The saddest part, though, is that you were totally right in making that conclusion. That's all they really are...sadly. But anyways it was a fantastic write, something so very fresh and unique in a way, and it was great to read. |
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Re: The Dream Catcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by Cesaria1 on
Saturday, 16th April 2005 @ 12:10:00 PM AEST (User
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heartfelt imagery. |
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Re: The Dream Catcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by freckle on
Saturday, 16th April 2005 @ 10:25:06 PM AEST (User
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Nice poem. Great imagery. I liked it.
Carol |
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