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Blackened Blood of Dispair
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
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Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 08:18:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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The invalid truths of life
And the complete and utter lies
Slowly building up inside
Untill the tears form and cry
Sights that cease to exist
Blinded by the undieing color
Of the blood coming from your wrist
A lonely life waiting to end
As death is creeping quickly in
Sight is gone, but you can still feel the spin
Of the memories left to inevitably bend
The blood is too much for your body to clot
It keeps coming untill you're drained
Of the life you profusely fought
Your body lieing demurely lifeless
And the stain of blood painfully uncompressed
You apparently thought this was for the best
And hopefully in peace you'll rest
As your heart no longer beats, nor do you breathe air
For your body is now null and void
Of the blackened blood of dispair
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ForeverAlone
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2005-04-15 20:18:21]
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Re: Blackened Blood of Dispair
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by spazz911 on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 08:34:08 PM AEST
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if i had to pick an undescribable poem well this would be it, it is so lifelike so true well wishing u well
~kc~ |
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Re: Blackened Blood of Dispair
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by Jackee_line on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 08:46:45 PM AEST
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| well done |
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Re: Blackened Blood of Dispair
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by Tru2Myself on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 10:26:03 PM AEST
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| Utterly Amazing. Outstanding. I LOVED IT. Errie but amazing |
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Re: Blackened Blood of Dispair
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 16th April 2005 @ 02:34:37 AM AEST
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Wow I agree with the above comment, this is pretty darn good.
You've managed to portray your message clearly, not to mention vivdly, and I love the flow..
Rhyme scheme's pretty good too ;)
Great write, keep going!
Hope,
~kt |
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Re: Blackened Blood of Dispair
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 16th April 2005 @ 10:17:15 PM AEST
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| ::jealous:: ::hmph:: brilliant poem. ::goes off to try and write something better:: lol =] keep them coming clark. |
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