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i can't go on...
Contributed by
keerthy
on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 10:12:06 AM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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When the breath ceases
And the heartbeat is heard no more
In the midst of the mourning
Crowded by fake men
Here I stand
All alone
Looking into your face so pale
Wishing it were all a dream
Moments ago
You in your deathbed
Held my hands tight
You looked deep in my eyes
A look that meant its going to end
I could feel your longingness
To imagine to be existent
Without you beside
Pains my heartits impossible I thought!
Fear of dereliction seems to have taken control of all my senses
And now
Though words remain unspoken
I can hear you saying, I miss you.
Oh! My loveso do I!
I wet your face with tears.
Sorrow begins nowI would soon fade away
I crave for you every moment
My head is jammed with thoughts about you
Emotions flutter at regular intervals
Leaving me in a pool of priceless memories
Of all those wonderful moments we spent together
In each others armsplunging into an ocean of undying passion
Those long late night walks we tookhand in hand
Beneath the star studded skyon the white sandshearing the silvery waves roar high
The shells we collectedthe sand castles we made
life cannot get more cruel...living makes no sense...if not with you
Where do I go?? What do I do??
Is there an option I gotthat would be better than death?
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keerthy
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2005-04-17 10:12:06]
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Re: i can't go on...
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by sride686 on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 10:50:47 AM AEST
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| Very good write I could really feel the emotion in it. I’ve never lost a love like this to death and I could only imagine the pain. I do know I’ve lost love and that ripped my heart out. But there are always things better then death. I to have asked myself that question but then I stopped and thought about the lives I would hurt and how my loved ones would see me from heaven. I really liked this line you wrote “life cannot get more cruel...living makes no sense...if not with you” You live to touch lives with these words you wrote and I thank you for this powerful stroke of your pin….Steve |
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Re: i can't go on...
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 10:53:24 AM AEST
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Hmm, this is good.
It reminds me of Romeo and Juliet a little.
This is beautiful, and so very sad.
Great write,
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: i can't go on...
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by smiley_jennyxoxo on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 12:07:15 PM AEST
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| That was a superb poem! I can feel the emotion out of the words... however i too have never lost love through death, but i have lost love, and it hurts, i've been heartbroken once. Otherwise, I may have been the heartbreaker... Your poem lets out great emotion about losing love, now i'll think more about the partner's emotion than before... ahead of my emotions possibly... Thanks Jenny |
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Re: i can't go on...
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by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 02:40:38 PM AEST
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A peice of writting that has been touched with
an angels pen, fortelling of things 2 come, a
deep emotional experience almost 2 painful
2 accept, and yet inevitable . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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