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Let It Rain
Contributed by
strayarmadillo
on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 08:40:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Stuck like a lug on
a wheel that's rusted,
you squeak as you spin,
numb and disgusted.
Ruts of compaction:
easy route taken.
The longer you spin:
tighter the tension.
Let rain fill the ruts.
Mud blurs digression.
Let rain rust the bond;
free the connection.
Let rain fill my gut;
bring growth from within.
Let rain cleanse my soul.
Let wheel cease to spin.
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strayarmadillo
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2005-04-17 20:40:45]
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Re: Let It Rain
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by blue_angel on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 11:31:13 AM AEST
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i think i can sum it up into one word... amazing. i love the style and the emotion in it is just... wow. i just love it!
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Re: Let It Rain
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by girltranscended on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 08:40:04 PM AEST
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This says so much just beneath the surface. Gotta say the beginning here:
Stuck like a lug on
a wheel that's rusted,
you squeak as you spin,
numb and disgusted.
is really very interesting and powerful. (Numb and disgusted especially) :) Same with your ending:
Let rain fill my gut;
bring growth from within.
Let rain cleanse my soul.
Let wheel cease to spin.
But it moves toward hopeful. I like the image of rain filling your gut, cause like it or not, I got one.
Please keep writing and posting my friend.
:)
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