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overtaken
Contributed by
bianca
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Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 09:42:56 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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submitting to expansive infertility
i bow my head
the gratitude rests heavy on my scalp.
with breakneck speed the inchworm travels
gripping fibers of my insufficient neck
he watches
me. the insects knowledge
far outweighs the cumbersome intuition of the soul;
rather
than heeding ephemeral words unclinging from the glass
he exudes a poison glue.
i surrender my mind to the inchworms breath
Copyright ©
bianca
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2005-04-23 09:42:56]
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Re: overtaken
(User Rating: 1 )
by electrique_poet on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 01:26:14 PM AEST
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this is a great poem, i like your vocabulary as well as the arrangment of the poem, the sense of giving in gives this poem a dark tone, i enjoyed reading this as i have your others
... in words electrique |
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Re: overtaken
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 12:16:30 AM AEST
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This is different, and pleasently so. The structure was interesting, and neat, to say the least. Overall, this was very well done.
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